You are the BBE!!! It's so shiny because you polished it so well! It would have been filled with typos if it wasn't for you! I heart you so much.... *hugs*
Yep, Prime isn't a stupid mech...he figured it out and now he's going to put a stop to it! What good is fighting for their ideals and code if they are doing it in a way that is no better...in some ways worse, than the Cons? Esp when it forces good mechs to do terrible things!! Yep, now Prime has a fire lit under him =) Rightous fire is hot!!!
I'm curious to see what sort of team Jazz and Prowl end up as...are they going neutral, or is this more of a vow to themselves not to take such a command again? I have a feeling Prime will be calling them into his office soon and try to apoligize for what has happened. Not that he really can affect things, but he has always been one to take on the weight of the world. I think Prime is about to wage war on the evil in the council...about time too!!
Yes, Prime won't stand and let someone else run his army, his soldiers dieing while the politicians sat save, waiting for someone else to do their dirty work. It's about to end.
In a way Prowl and Jazz are neutral but they still consider themselves as Autobots. For them (and in truth really) the Autobots are the lesser of two evils.
Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! ^^
The dynamics between Prowl and Jazz are strengthening their connection; the Council and Optimus are falling apart. Reading about this change, the complex nature of what is going on, is very intriguing. I'm looking forward to seeing Prime's interaction with Prowl and Jazz, and how long it takes them to trust that Prime is on the correct side. Wonderful story so far.
It's going to be hard for Prowl and Jazz to actually 'trust' Optimus. They are still coming to terms with the trust they place in each other, because they actually have something to lose, and each step will be cautious. :)
I adored how your wrote Jazz and Prowl in this chapter. But I also liked how you showed the after math of the mission from Optimus's POV, and how he wants to take a stand against a corrupt counsel. I can't wait to see where you go with this :D
I'm pretty stocked to see what will happen to the council. They deserve whatever the get and hopefully Prowl and Jazz will get the chance to exact their revenge. :D
Great chapter! I love what you've changed to the first version. Especially Optimus. He's so determined and the Council has no idea that they have made a new enemy.
"Eyeing their Prime warily as they left, the two black and whites didn't notice that the scrutiny was mutual."
This sentence was very, very interesting. Even though Optimus is against the orders, against the council ... he doesn't know what the SpecOps think about it all. I confess if I were Optimus and I had seen this scene in the rec room, knowing that those two were the true murderers of the younglings... I would have shivered. They're so cold, so controlled even in the face of this accusations. If you don't know, you would never guess... And that makes them so very dangerous.
About Prowl and Jazz: They've formed their own team. Prowl is right, this talk is treason, and yet... it's necesseray. It gives them the freedom of thought. In reality they're mercenary nows, not true Autobots. Interesting position. :D
Yes, the scene with OP needed the most work. It was very boring and repeating itself. It was then that this bunny mutated into something much bigger.
Optimus will be forced to witness what was going on behind his back and if he wants to change it the outcome of the war he'll need to accept it and move on.
I tried to make Prowl and Jazz indifferent when those accusation were made. They are too good at their job to let their emotions run free (even if Jazz struggles more to control himself). They have done the worst of the worst and come in therms with it - it wasn't easy, but it made them stronger in the end :)
Thing will start to radically change around them and if they wish to survive they'll need to adapt and learn that not all mechs are wired the same.
The work you've put into the Optimus scene was well worth it. You gave Optimus his own depth and a goal to fight for. I think he'll be horrifiend by what he'll find. But he has to, or nothing will change.
You succeeded with making them indifferent and that made it so chilling. They are stronger now, yes. Harder, colder, more distanced from the rest of the world. They are about each other and nothing else anymore.
I think they can learn this. But Optimus will have to work hard to get their trust. :)
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I'm curious to see what sort of team Jazz and Prowl end up as...are they going neutral, or is this more of a vow to themselves not to take such a command again? I have a feeling Prime will be calling them into his office soon and try to apoligize for what has happened. Not that he really can affect things, but he has always been one to take on the weight of the world. I think Prime is about to wage war on the evil in the council...about time too!!
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In a way Prowl and Jazz are neutral but they still consider themselves as Autobots. For them (and in truth really) the Autobots are the lesser of two evils.
Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! ^^
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It's going to be hard for Prowl and Jazz to actually 'trust' Optimus. They are still coming to terms with the trust they place in each other, because they actually have something to lose, and each step will be cautious. :)
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I loved this!
I adored how your wrote Jazz and Prowl in this chapter. But I also liked how you showed the after math of the mission from Optimus's POV, and how he wants to take a stand against a corrupt counsel. I can't wait to see where you go with this :D
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Yup, the Council made a huge error by dealing 'the easy' way the mission. So now they will pay the price :)
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"Eyeing their Prime warily as they left, the two black and whites didn't notice that the scrutiny was mutual."
This sentence was very, very interesting. Even though Optimus is against the orders, against the council ... he doesn't know what the SpecOps think about it all.
I confess if I were Optimus and I had seen this scene in the rec room, knowing that those two were the true murderers of the younglings... I would have shivered. They're so cold, so controlled even in the face of this accusations. If you don't know, you would never guess... And that makes them so very dangerous.
About Prowl and Jazz: They've formed their own team. Prowl is right, this talk is treason, and yet... it's necesseray. It gives them the freedom of thought. In reality they're mercenary nows, not true Autobots. Interesting position. :D
Can't wait for more!
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Optimus will be forced to witness what was going on behind his back and if he wants to change it the outcome of the war he'll need to accept it and move on.
I tried to make Prowl and Jazz indifferent when those accusation were made. They are too good at their job to let their emotions run free (even if Jazz struggles more to control himself). They have done the worst of the worst and come in therms with it - it wasn't easy, but it made them stronger in the end :)
Thing will start to radically change around them and if they wish to survive they'll need to adapt and learn that not all mechs are wired the same.
Thanks for reading! ^^
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I think he'll be horrifiend by what he'll find. But he has to, or nothing will change.
You succeeded with making them indifferent and that made it so chilling. They are stronger now, yes. Harder, colder, more distanced from the rest of the world. They are about each other and nothing else anymore.
I think they can learn this. But Optimus will have to work hard to get their trust. :)
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