Divorce

[muchtooarrogant]

AWOS Writing Challenge

Lauren tried the callout again, but as had happened a few moments earlier, the negative response she received was instantaneous.

The user you are trying to communicate with is not available!She stared up at the strange house in confusion. Unlike every other structure on the street, it possessed no visual embellishments, no

Comments

[dicediva]

Wow...I want more...

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! This was a lot of fun for me to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Dan

[lrig_rorrim]

I loved this. The characters are really well realized, the interactions between them are just perfect, and your vision of a super-connected world seems thisclose and is so well described I can really imagine how it would be to live in such an environment (and man, it would be hell on an introvert like me). Awesome!

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! The main reason I had Lauren interact with James first was because I thought of that classic storytelling rule, showing is better than telling, and I wanted the reader to see how both of them used their implants. So, I'm glad the superconnected aspect came through.

Honestly, I can understand both Lauren's and her Dad's viewpoints in this story. A part of me would love, love, love having access to all that information and interactability, but I think I'd be turning it off for some quiet times in the back yard as well. LOL

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

Dan

[sarcasmoqueen]

So it's basically a world where Facebook is in your head, right? Trippy...

You asked me if I like the sci-fi genre. The short answer is no. But, as with everything in my world, there is never an absolute. If I'm perusing for something new to read, I will rarely if ever gravitate towards the science fiction section in the bookstore, however, if I get to it in roundabout means, as in, the fact that it's sci-fi is just a minor detail in an engrossing story, then that's ok. This was still a story about people, not robots or human-bots or some such thing. I enjoyed it and wonder if there is more to the story. :-)

[muchtooarrogant]

Glad you liked it!

Hahaha, as a writer yourself, you should already know the answer to, "Is there more to the story?" There is if I think of it. *grin*

Dan