LJI S9.2, The Missing Stair

[muchtooarrogant]

When the yelling started from down stairs, I curled away from the noise, holding the book like a protective shield in front of my face. The individual words were mercifully indistinct at this distance, but the pitch and timbre clearly communicated the underlying anger of both parents. I checked my mental calendar and sighed. Yes, it was the last

Comments

[witchwife]

Hey Dan! This was really cool. My heart was drawn to both of your characters - and not just out of sympathy!

The dialogue was very believable and I loved the interior thought process shown on the protagonist's end. Not wanting to draw the conversation out in fear of bringing up more difficult subjects, etc. So well done.

Also, this line: "as though the shorter houses were baby teeth that hadn't yet been pushed out by their adult successors."

Excellent work.

The last bit about the pathway of light lost me for a bit, but your note at the bottom cleared things up a bit. I think the genre mash just took me by surprise. Interested in Hearne's series though. I love stuff like this. May order it from the library.

-Nichole

[muchtooarrogant]

Hey Nichole, thanks for reading, and for taking the time to post such positive feedback. I'm glad you liked my little adventure. :)

Hearne's stuff is a lot of fun, and most of that's quite apart from the magic going on. Even when the killin' starts, he manages to keep a mostly lighthearted tone throughout, and that's nice. My own fiction stuff is quite a bit darker generally, but I do enjoy lighthearted romps too. :)

Dan

[kickthehobbit]

...daaaaaaaaaaaaang, now I want to know where she went!

[muchtooarrogant]

Ah good, then perhaps I did something right. :) This was written after midnight for the most part, simply because I couldn't squeeze writing time in anywhere else.

Hope you liked, and thanks for the comment.

Dan

[kickthehobbit]

I did like it, rather a lot. :D I don't generally want to know more about stories I didn't enjoy. ;)

[muchtooarrogant]

Yeah yeah, fuss/pick. I is trying to be sure I thank every last person for reading my crap. *grin*

Dan

[mari4212]

Beautiful, and it does capture the sense of the lost entry into Faerie country at the edges of the normal world.

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! I pictured this as a confluence of several events, Erika's openness to see the path of light as a path, the sun's position combined with Robin's in the window, a house built in a place of magic. :) Humans don't generally fair all that wel in the realm of faerie though, so you do have to wonder if Erika truly made the best choice.

Thank you for reading, as well as for your kind words.

Dan

[muchtooarrogant]

Nonfiction, huh? Well, you know what they say about us writers, we steal from everyone, ourselves included. :) I wanted this to have the feel of magic suddenly present in the ordinary world, a shock, a surprise, and sometimes a path to somewhere else.

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Dan

[roina_arwen]

This was a great story, and I also loved the line about the buildings looking like baby teeth. Great job!

-Laura

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you, Laura. Very glad you liked it. :)

Dan