LJI S9.2, The Missing Stair

[muchtooarrogant]

When the yelling started from down stairs, I curled away from the noise, holding the book like a protective shield in front of my face. The individual words were mercifully indistinct at this distance, but the pitch and timbre clearly communicated the underlying anger of both parents. I checked my mental calendar and sighed. Yes, it was the last

Comments

[n3m3sis43]

I love how effortlessly you capture young people in your writing. It is a skill I very much wish I had. I didn't expect the ending, but it was awesome. :D

[muchtooarrogant]

Ha, that's excellent! I can finally tell Lizbeth that there's a use to my being able to think and/or act like a kid. *big grin*

Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for reading and commenting.

Dan

[n3m3sis43]

I seem to have the emotional maturity of a toddler. Maybe I should try first-person toddler POV. (Just kidding! Can you imagine how awful that would be?)

[muchtooarrogant]

Oh, I dunno, I've seen several people writing from the POV of animals, why not toddlers? *evil grin*

Dan

[lawchicky]

You totally had me going there and I loved it from start to finish.

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! So often, you hear people lament that they'd like more magic in their lives, but that could be pretty dangerous in the end. :)

Glad you enjoyed.

Dan

[halfshellvenus]

I thought it was non-fiction too, until the ending!

I loved how real it felt, though, and I felt bad for Robin getting left behind, whether or not his sister made the right choice.

[muchtooarrogant]

Yes, I was thinking about adding a whole section detailing how Robin dealt with the aftermath of Erika's disappearance, but didn't really have the time to do it justice.

You know what's funny, I couldn't decide whether to make Erika's sibling a boy or girl, so chose an ambiguous name like Robin that could go either way. :) After I finished writing it, I personally thought Robin's character felt more feminine, but that's just me.

Glad you liked, and thanks so much for commenting.

Dan

[halfshellvenus]

I'd assumed the narrator was a boy, because I thought it was non-fiction at first! And then realized that you hadn't explicitly stated, so realized that that was probably deliberate. :D

[eternal_ot]

Loved reading it... a nice built up till the anticlimax !

[muchtooarrogant]

Thank you! I'm glad the story caught your interest. :)

Dan

[sarcasmoqueen]

Then what happened??

You drag me in... then leave me hanging! Which I suppose was your goal, so well done!

[muchtooarrogant]

Glad I was able to draw you in, and sorry for the hanging bit. :) It's a bit of a reader's hazard where Idol's concerned I think, at least in these early stages with so many entries. But hey, perhaps a future story in this same universe???

Thanks for reading!

Dan