Brigit's Flame, week three

[mullvaney]

In the 17th and 18th centuries, many people were named for virtues and graces. This piece uses this as a bit of a play on words

Comments

[mermaidbia]

This is so beautiful. (so many amazing entries this week)
I love how gracefully you handle the dialogue - very old-fashioned, but not too much - and the noun-turned-names of the characters make this almost a silent analogy, or satire.

Awesome work.

[mullvaney]

Thank you! you're right, everyone's entry is fabulous this week.

[insolentscrawl]

This is very nice. I like the descriptions.

Good luck this week.

[mullvaney]

Thank you!

[cedarwolfsinger]

This has a very 1600s feel to it. I can see this as happening in the Massachusetts Bay Colony somehow. Interesting. Good luck.

[mullvaney]

Thank you!

[merthin]

I very much enjoyed the plays on word-names and the regarding comments. I especially liked, ". . . Justice has always been fond of those with money." :-)

[aine_marihugh]

Me too! I really enjoyed how well you brought out the individual personalities of the characters in such a short piece. Even given their names, they still were fleshed-out very well. Very wry. Congrats!

[mullvaney]

Thank you! In my head, it played like a scene from The Crucible

[mullvaney]

Thank you! Justice and Industry are fickle indeed!

Editor II

[triplescorpio]

I'm one of your editors this week. I thought this was a lovely job of writing that has the feel of an allegory as well as a satire. You very effectively convey society's condemnation of these women, while expressing the artificial righteousness behind it. I can't think of any improvements in grammar or style. Great job!

Re: Editor II

[mullvaney]

Wow, really? no mistakes? I think I'll go buy a lottery ticket ... Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!