First off: I'm not a pro writer, but I do beta reading. I'll tell you my honest opinion if you don't mind.^^
A thing I really want to point out is that I like your style of writing. And Banghim is one of my favorite OTPs XD
I especially liked the beginning of the fanfiction, though I think it's a bit unclear how Yongguk can tell just by the steps that it's Himchan.
The plot develops really fast as they suddenly kiss out of the blue. Are they a couple for some time already? I think you could have pointed that out, but it's not a must.
I also liked the ending with the cigarette. It was a good sentence to end the story.
I really enjoyed reading this fanfiction~ Although I think it was a bit too short. :/ To make it longer you could, for example, add some more details etc.
I’m looking forward to reading more of your works. :P Peace!
As long as you're not too harsh on me, I accept it lol 8D
Awwie thanks ;-; it's kinda nice how BangHim have shippers already :DD
Well they're been living together for a year or so, and you know how you can tell whether it's your mom or dad coming without actually seeing them? Yeaaa, that kind of thing :DD
That I don't even know myself... I'll keep it in mind tho, maybe I'll edit it or something~ ^^
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First off: I'm not a pro writer, but I do beta reading. I'll tell you my honest opinion if you don't mind.^^
A thing I really want to point out is that I like your style of writing.
And Banghim is one of my favorite OTPs XD
I especially liked the beginning of the fanfiction, though I think it's a bit unclear how Yongguk can tell just by the steps that it's Himchan.
The plot develops really fast as they suddenly kiss out of the blue. Are they a couple for some time already? I think you could have pointed that out, but it's not a must.
I also liked the ending with the cigarette. It was a good sentence to end the story.
I really enjoyed reading this fanfiction~ Although I think it was a bit too short. :/ To make it longer you could, for example, add some more details etc.
I’m looking forward to reading more of your works. :P
Peace!
(BTW, I added you as a friend.^^)
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Awwie thanks ;-; it's kinda nice how BangHim have shippers already :DD
Well they're been living together for a year or so, and you know how you can tell whether it's your mom or dad coming without actually seeing them? Yeaaa, that kind of thing :DD
That I don't even know myself... I'll keep it in mind tho, maybe I'll edit it or something~ ^^
Sankyuuu <3 Adding you back :3
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it's the first BangHim fanfic i've ever read :)
Yongguk and Himchan. On Stage they re Warrior
but off stage, they come back to normal normal people, normal life :)
awn thank you *sob* T _______ T
glad to know that you are an ELF too xD
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btw, can i have permission from you to translate Secrect Love into Vietnamese? :)
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haha, yeah i am! \o/
you can, as long as you credit me ^^
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thanks > v
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Your fic is a little bit calm and quite, but still great ♥
Can I translate this fic into Vietnamese? I'll credit it to you :)
Thanks :)
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