Looking For Opinions

[muse_0f_fire]

I'm working on a new discworld fic that is Susan/Teatime in nature at the moment and I thought I'd post what I have of it here for feedback.  Let's see if anyone notices.  *g*

Spoilers here not only for Hogfather but also for Soul Music and Thief of Time.

BTW, this is totally without a title and recommendations would be appreciated.

Comments

[jeminisoul]

Yes, please continue!!! This is so good, sirously- this is amazing. You have the relationship just right. I love the whole 'I dislike it when you break into my house in the middle of the night' line.

As to ideas for titles? I'm all out, may think of one later ^^U

Also chocolate flavored kisses = FTW

[masquedbunny]

First off--love it and, yes, please do continue.

Where to go with it, though ... depends on how you see their relationship, really. A fixated Jonathan Teatime with a fierce sense of entitlement is pretty easy to swallow. Continued fixation? Sure. Irritable and reluctantly drawn in Susan? Yes, for a while. I think realistically (or canonically) moving Susan beyond that mental place is the biggest obstacle. If that's even what you want to do--it might not be. After all, striving for a healthy relationship with this pairing is kind of outside the point; the beauty of them is that you can write some very twisted situations and emotions that are quite believable. Go all out.

How you see or intend to deal with their relationship might be a good source for a title. Breaking and entering seems to be a feature that could be recurring ...

Aaaannnd ... I ramble. Please ignore me and continue. :)