It's raining outside, pouring buckets; the thunder and lightning make it nearly impossible for Lily Potter to think clearly. She wants to scream and break things until she feels whole.
The baby is in his crib, crying, again"This isn't a life for him, James." she says, scooping up small Harry in her arms
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Re: Fateful night (G)starry_laaAugust 7 2011, 09:18:40 UTC
This is sad and wonderful at the same time. You get a true sense of the despair the whole being-in-hiding thing must have brought them and James' trying his best to protect his family and reassure his wife is touching.
Re: Fateful night (G)firstbreathsAugust 7 2011, 09:21:06 UTC
I'm just going to sit here and fix my heart back up with sticky tape. ♥
Having said that, I adore the dynamic here -- that Lily is scared and all, but mostly just so incredibly frustrated and that James is trying so hard to be supportive and reassuring even though he's obviously just as terrified.
Re: Fateful night (G)celestineangelAugust 7 2011, 13:24:22 UTC
::sobs::
Seriously this is so... OMGs, thank you for filling this. Like everyone else said, you've really captured the emotion, what it must feel like to be so cooped up for such an important, frightening reason. You've conveyed James' fear without saying it outright, and how much they love each other despite it all.
Re: Fateful night (G)museme87August 7 2011, 14:08:25 UTC
Such a tense moment. It's so easy to tell that James and Lily are both at their breaking point here. For some reason, I get the impression that Lily is ready to throw caution to the wind in her frustration and just do something about it. James, on the other hand, is just scared out of his wits but feels like he's bottling it up to keep it together. It was really heartbreaking. I also loved your use of dramatic irony here.
Re: Fateful night (G)desdsAugust 7 2011, 19:23:01 UTC
I think her mindset at this point is "Let's find him before he finds us and get it over with." She's just tired and terrified and she's usually the careful one but their roles have been shifting for a while...must not ramble
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It's raining outside, pouring buckets; the thunder and lightning make it nearly impossible for Lily Potter to think clearly. She wants to scream and break things until she feels whole.
The baby is in his crib, crying, again"This isn't a life for him, James." she says, scooping up small Harry in her arms ( ... )
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Having said that, I adore the dynamic here -- that Lily is scared and all, but mostly just so incredibly frustrated and that James is trying so hard to be supportive and reassuring even though he's obviously just as terrified.
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Frustrated is the perfect word. I'm so glad I was able to get that point across. I'm very happy you liked it and I appreciate the kind words!
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“I promise you, it’ll all be over soon."
It kind of haunts me because for Lily and James, it really will be over, all too soon. :( damn, girl. <3
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I like to think this took place just seconds before Voldemort comes barging through the door, so yes, it will be done very soon. ;D
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Seriously this is so... OMGs, thank you for filling this. Like everyone else said, you've really captured the emotion, what it must feel like to be so cooped up for such an important, frightening reason. You've conveyed James' fear without saying it outright, and how much they love each other despite it all.
Love this, love you, thank you!
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Your prompt immediately jumped out at me and it's the very first piece of James/Lily I have ever written! Keep up the great prompts! :D
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Glad you enjoyed! Thanks for putting this comment ficathon together!
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