It's raining outside, pouring buckets; the thunder and lightning make it nearly impossible for Lily Potter to think clearly. She wants to scream and break things until she feels whole.
The baby is in his crib, crying, again"This isn't a life for him, James." she says, scooping up small Harry in her arms
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Re: Fateful night (G)iltashAugust 9 2011, 06:49:50 UTC
oh, wow, the last line (“I promise you, it’ll all be over soon.") was heartbreaking. Because it was over soon after that, but they didn't know and that's... This saddens me. I also loved the contrast between breaking things until feeling whole. I feel like this captured the dilemma really well.
Re: Fateful night (G)kloseAugust 10 2011, 06:31:04 UTC
Ack! That last line! D: D: D:
Great depiction of the tense restlessness of the time, though - you did a great job of setting up the atmosphere, with the thunderstorm and them peeking out the window. This is lovely, if rather painful to read!
It's raining outside, pouring buckets; the thunder and lightning make it nearly impossible for Lily Potter to think clearly. She wants to scream and break things until she feels whole.
The baby is in his crib, crying, again"This isn't a life for him, James." she says, scooping up small Harry in her arms ( ... )
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Great depiction of the tense restlessness of the time, though - you did a great job of setting up the atmosphere, with the thunderstorm and them peeking out the window. This is lovely, if rather painful to read!
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