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Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part I)

[liebedance]

First Year

He was rotten, James Potter was. God, he was spoiled. Had everything under the sun - the loving family, the mountains of gold, the boyish charm, the adoring friends - and it was so obvious he knew it. And, Lily was so glad that Sev had never been so over-indulged.

Second Year

At least once a week, something was blown up. A cauldron of half-brewed potions, charmed pineapples, telescopes, suits of armour... It was, Lily thought, like a castle-wide game of Exploding Snap. Nothing and nobody was completely safe from Black and Potter.

"Why do they do that?" whispered to Sev as Professor McGonagall was reprimanding them for a particularly loud and messy explosion at breakfast that morning.

Sev just rolled his eyes. "They're immature, Lily. There's nothing else to it."

Lily crinkled her nose in distaste, thanking Merlin that she had chosen someone much more mature as a best mate.

Third Year"Ouch!" Lily exclaimed, shaking her now-throbbing hand. "Potter, watch what you're doing

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[liebedance]

I mean, Remus was a Marauder, yeah? So of course he'd be a bit like that, though I doubt he ever did any bullying himself. But the really harmless things, I bet he thought were funny.

Thanks, and I'm really glad you like it!

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[con_spire]

I love you treated the prompt, very character development driven. I kind of interpreted your piece as Lily being very volatile and insecure and confused, so having no other intimate male relationships than her one with Sev, she brutally tries to compartmentalize what she feels for James. And I loved that. Especially as James utterly destroys the box she's forced him into when he handles her depression very kindly and maturely and mmm <3

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[liebedance]

Oh, thank you very much! I love it when people tell me how they interpreted my work... especially when people take things from it that I didn't mean to put in! It's honestly one of the most fascinating things, I think. You know? It's not "what did the author mean" but "what can I take from this". So, yay!

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[eprime]

I loved the scenes you chose here. I think my favorite is the one with Remus. I like him defending the "funny" bullying and Lily actually wanting to smile. Lovely work!

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[klose]

This is lovely, Leah! I especially like the looks at L/J before Snape's Worst Memory, such as the conversation with Remus... that progression in Lily's thinking comes through so naturally. Well done! :D

Re: Six Steps Towards Something [PG] (Part II)

[zia_montrose]

Finally stealing a moment to read some of these and..what can I say except that I really enjoyed this one! Always love it when Petunia shows up in a fic and I love the one sentence excerpt from her letter and this: It was just one more brick being pulled from the foundation of Lily's life. Also liked her conversation with Remus and, well, all the bits with James. The whole ficlet was really well done and well-characterized! Glad I got to read. : )