PART IIII: Over My Shoulder (Running Away)

[musicloveraar]

Over My Shoulder (Running Away)
23,583 words, PG-15
Adam/Kris

Comments

[onlyndreams85]

I loved this, the story totally pulled me in. The characters were just SO real. Everyone has history, and issues, and pain in their lives, some people much more severe, but I found that I could relate to the way that they felt, especially Kris. Even though the story could have been really depressing, I found that it felt more hopeful and inspiring through watching their friendship and relationship develop as they started opening up to each other. I am so happy that they found each other and can start healing together. <3 <3

[musicloveraar]

Aw, thank you so much <3
I was definitely going for hopeful rather than depressing, so I'm glad that came though. What a lovely comment :)

[crybaby4u]

There are some really harsh realities going on in this story. There is still a lot more I think that needs be said. I hope you revisit one day and let them tell the rest of their story.

Thanks for sharing.

[musicloveraar]

Thank you for reading! Interesting thoughts... I'm sure I might revisit them one day, but I'm not sure how well I'd be able to write them again - I wouldn't want to ruin this story by writing a bad follow-up. Was there something that you particularly felt I needed to put in the story that should have been?
Never say never, though.

[crybaby4u]

I think Kris' is w/his mother and sister and his dad's abuse need a little more work through.

He was very supportive of Adam and his issues with abuse yet all the while holding on to his on dark secrets.

I am sure off page they work through it but it just felt like you were on the verge of getting to it but Kris didn't want to talk about it.

The ending is open ended. You can foresee they may end up happy but with Kris' issue and Dylan's threat to get Adam there is room to explore.

I can understand not wanting to though. If your muses don't give you more then I think you're ok to leave here we can fill in the mental blanks.

Just food for thought about where else you could go but honestly its fine at this ending because you leave your readers creating their own ideas about what happened next.

[musicloveraar]

No, you're exactly right - it's all food for thought. Thanks for you feedback :)

[alienanalysis]

Wow, great story! Kris & Adam's back-stories were both incredibly heartbreaking and sad, yet the ending was so full of hope now that they have the support of one another :)

Beautifully written, great job bb <3

[musicloveraar]

Thank you so much!!! That's a lovely comment <3

[cutoutawindow]

This is so twisted, but so good, too. Did not expect all this from a Starbucks story. lol Nicely done. <3

[musicloveraar]

Thank you! I'm glad it wasn't just another Starbucks story :)

[crisanne07]

such a beautiful story <333
Hope there will be a sequel :))))

[musicloveraar]

Thank you so much! I'm thinking about doing a sequel... somebody above said something about tying some stray ends together with Kris's story, so I'll definitely think about it :)