Wow. I'm really glad they got back together. I was really worried this book would be ended with Mack standing alone in the hallway and Amaranth in tears.
Very impressed. Just finished reading your archive yesterday.
I have to say that i have never read something so unique and curiously erotic as this series in my life. The depth of the characters is amazing.
Also, I RP a lot so i have come across some unique worlds and settings but I'm grabbing heaps of ideas from your setting. I don't know why but the idea of a world with all the conveniences of ours but sculpted by magic just never occurred to me. :D
Very nice end to the book, though it's funny that Mack still hasn't figured out she's having orgasms or that Steff is a boy (or at least something in between).
I'm curious; how far ahead was all this planned? Did you know when you first started writing this that Amy was going to end up playing the dominant to Mack's submissive in a relationship that Mack doesn't even realize is sexual? Or did the relationship between Amy and Mack just sort of happen? I'm curious because it very much feels like, when you go back and read the archive, that the story veered off in a direction you weren't expecting (which isn't a bad thing, that's just how it seems to me). Is that actually the case?
When I started writing the first chapter, I knew almost nothing (I didn't even know what the "MU" in the title was, though I worked that out pretty quickly)... I didn't even have a premise.
By the time I'd finished, I knew a lot about the main character and pretty much where the story was going.
I don't want to analzye the story for people (because I'd rather see how they read it in a vacuum), but there's hints in the characters' initial appearances about their true natures. The first chapter has Mackenzie castigating herself for missing the main entrance to the building (as if one door was "right" just because it was the one with the sign pointing to it), and then the next one, for making a simple mistake on the floor numbering. Then, there's her first encounter with Sooni... the first time she does her "pretty girl freeze"... and it's only chapter 4.
Mackenzie shows herself to be somebody who dwells on every humiliation, in an almost literal sense: she lives within it. The fact that she can be turned on by it is explained by
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Ah, thanks; I appreciate your thoughts on the process. Also, I did, in fact, have Puddy in the back of my mind as well, and I'm looking forward to seeing how that plays out.
It seems to me that Amaranth has been really paying attention while Mack was instructing Two, and used the same general principles and guidelines on Mack, as if she was her very own golem. <3
What's interesting is, I think the reason Mackenzie always knows what to say to Two is because she knows what she would need to hear. And I bet, as Amaranth learns more about Mackenzie, she'll also learn how to better help Two. There's definitely a parallel there.
Great ending for book 2
anonymous
August 14 2007, 06:43:09 UTC
I think I found a typo:
"...but with all of her skill and natural insticts brought to bear upon me, as well." Shouldn't 'insticts' be 'instincts'?
And shouldn't "I bit my lip to try to keep in what WOULD I knew would be a monstrously out of place gasping cry of exultation." be 'what I knew would be a...'? (Not really sure about this one, I am no native speaker.)
Wonderful ending for this second book. I am looking forward to reading book three.
Re: Great ending for book 2stormcaller3801August 14 2007, 13:47:52 UTC
I can't say for certain, not being Alexandria, but at least the 'would I knew would' thing is something I catch myself doing. It's usually because my brain heads off on a tangent mid-sentence, and I sort of 'latch on' to what I was saying before by repeating it. I don't realize what I'm doing, I just know I'm trying to finish the thought, so I try to get back where I was. Of course, where I was may not be where I need to be- but it puts me on the right track to keep going.
Greatness, thy name is Alexandra Eringranite_grizzAugust 14 2007, 09:30:02 UTC
I love this chapter and I Love the series. I wish that I had found people to push me beyond my comfort level (but without me feeling used) during my first year at university. I appreciate loading this site almost every day, and (more often than not) having new material to read, especially since I have no idea how you do it so well and fast, Alexandra. I can't wait to read more... more... well, everything.
Thank you for the new reality I have come to enjoy.
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Very impressed. Just finished reading your archive yesterday.
I have to say that i have never read something so unique and curiously erotic as this series in my life. The depth of the characters is amazing.
Also, I RP a lot so i have come across some unique worlds and settings but I'm grabbing heaps of ideas from your setting. I don't know why but the idea of a world with all the conveniences of ours but sculpted by magic just never occurred to me. :D
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I'm curious; how far ahead was all this planned? Did you know when you first started writing this that Amy was going to end up playing the dominant to Mack's submissive in a relationship that Mack doesn't even realize is sexual? Or did the relationship between Amy and Mack just sort of happen? I'm curious because it very much feels like, when you go back and read the archive, that the story veered off in a direction you weren't expecting (which isn't a bad thing, that's just how it seems to me). Is that actually the case?
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By the time I'd finished, I knew a lot about the main character and pretty much where the story was going.
I don't want to analzye the story for people (because I'd rather see how they read it in a vacuum), but there's hints in the characters' initial appearances about their true natures. The first chapter has Mackenzie castigating herself for missing the main entrance to the building (as if one door was "right" just because it was the one with the sign pointing to it), and then the next one, for making a simple mistake on the floor numbering. Then, there's her first encounter with Sooni... the first time she does her "pretty girl freeze"... and it's only chapter 4.
Mackenzie shows herself to be somebody who dwells on every humiliation, in an almost literal sense: she lives within it. The fact that she can be turned on by it is explained by ( ... )
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"...but with all of her skill and natural insticts brought to bear upon me, as well."
Shouldn't 'insticts' be 'instincts'?
And shouldn't "I bit my lip to try to keep in what WOULD I knew would be a monstrously out of place gasping cry of exultation." be 'what I knew would be a...'? (Not really sure about this one, I am no native speaker.)
Wonderful ending for this second book. I am looking forward to reading book three.
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Thank you for the new reality I have come to enjoy.
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