Chrissy LeMonet - Session 8 (Journal)

Jun 09, 2006 17:36

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uzaer June 10 2006, 21:43:40 UTC
I was talking to a friend once and we both agreed that writing anything in first character is pretty tough. Its not so much the personal aspect, but the repetitive use of 'I' which annoyed us both. However, while reading your story, the I's me's and myself's are fairly spread out so it does actually feel like im reading something which has flow and thought.

The journal aspect is great. keep it up. My only advice, watch out for irregular commas. Some sentences seem run on, but since it is a journal setting, I dont think it matters either way.

Take care bro,
Uz.

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mykiecoin June 10 2006, 21:47:00 UTC
Especially as it is the journal of a 14 year old girl...

So i try to write as I would if I didn't have the enormous skill that I do :P

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uzaer June 10 2006, 21:48:24 UTC
Yes. there is that.
:p

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