Little Black Wings

[mythos_9]

Wow, didn't THIS take a long time to get out. Though, I hadn't planned on switching jobs in the middle of it either. Still not done with the second part, but I should be able to finish it up in the next day or two.

Hope you read and enjoy! :)

Comments

[danihana]

Good, good.
Where is me? :P

[mythos_9]

Heh. You is not in this one! You is in next story, "I Can Make You A Man"...is about you and Gerry. This story about Mythos. :)

[cholma]

TL;DR

Just kidding! True or not, I always feel no one reads the crap I put out, mostly because it's so long. (After all, they can't know it's crap if they didn't read it, right?) :D

It's not bad, not bad at all.

Typo: do a search for: any you need to remove that first slash. It's at the point when Myth first meets Tracey in The Vault.

Editorial note: Your story assumes that everyone knows "Happy Pure" and who all the characters are (particularly their, um, uniqueness). You should include flavor text in the opening paragraphs that more explicitly describe who these four people are. With the original comic, it wasn't really necessary since it was visual, but would be helpful here.

Speaking of "explicitly", thank you for not being explicit. ;)

[mythos_9]

You forget that I spent the better part of four years and several hundred THOUSAND words writing for Willis and Shive. I'm used to no one reading it.

As for the <>, yeah, it was a find and replace error. Thought I'd got them all. :P

And yes, I DO assume that everyone's read HP because that's who I wrote this for. I suppose I could go straight sci fi and include all the little intimates, but hells, this wasn't written for publication. I wrote this for fun and for cathartic measure.

And what's wrong with being explicit? I thought I went way WAY too far NON-explicit with the Vault. Besides, you might want to hold off on that until you read part 2. *I* don't think it's explicit. ;)

[mrsanimal]

I agree with Cholm on the character descriptions. I got it, but didn't at the same time. I read (and write, when I have time) a lot, and reading about non-human's with minimal description can be frustrating. Of course, I like the way you add details as you go - as long as I get the full 'picture' eventually. :)

[mythos_9]

Please, I hope the both of you understand that this is the first thing I've been able to write in over a year and a half. Stuff gets rusty...-_-