Poetry, short fiction, and...muffins?

[nightpoet00]

Another somewhat productive day.  Two more poems written plus about 700 more words added to the short story.  Oh, and I baked some mildly successful cranberry-raspberry muffins, which I may have over-cooked slightly.  They tasted pretty good, especially since I ended up substituting yogurt and vinegar for the buttermilk and eggs.  Oops.

Comments

[parsnip_chan]

This is very well written, and I love the rhythm you've found for this excerpt. It also makes me wonder what exactly was Harold doing that would make him think a police officer is an inconvenience.

My one critique would be the dual use of 'huffing' in the last sentence of the second paragraph. I'm not quite sure if that's intentional or not.

Good luck with your writing today!

[nightpoet00]

Oops good catch! There definitely should not be two "huffing's." Thank you for your comments!