Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 5

[o2binla]

Title: Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 5
Description: Canon AU beginning in 1983; Jack leaves Texas instead of dying. 
Warnings: MO!Jack.  More Jack coping than just plain forgetting about Ennis, but this story includes an *explicit* non-J/E pairing, in this chapter.  Feel free to skip it if you hate that. 
Comments: Much appreciated. 
Disclaimer: Not

Comments

[samtyr]

I know that Jack has the right to move on but it sure makes me sad. I hope that his surgery will go ok; it seems like his boss is being as accomodating as possible while he recovers. It was also super-nice of him to fly Jack down to Childress so he could see Bobby for Christmas. I am disappointed in Ennis' response but on the other hand, I am hopeful that he will decide to get in touch with Jack after the surgery (a visit might be too much to hope for, but maybe a phone call? ::crosses fingers::)

[o2binla]

Jack does have a lot of good things going for him right now, like his boss and a decent group of guys to hang out with, but Ennis' response is a bummer. I figure Ennis really *is* busy, and also probably freaked out about what Jack's new life might involve, so I guess we'll see if he has the nerve to call or show up... :-) Thank you for reading!

[prunusmume]

As depressing as it is, this is the most realistically possible move-on story I've read so far. Thank you for writing.

[o2binla]

That's a big compliment! Thank you for reading.

Slippin into Darkness

[argentine65]

Jack can move on but deep inside he knows quite well that he belongs to Ennis. Thank you for sharing. Martha

Re: Slippin into Darkness

[o2binla]

Hi Martha, Jack isn't over Ennis by any means, although this Ennis isn't around. Thank you for reading!

[bbm_citygirl]

Really excellent Lisa. You are doing a great job of conveying Jack's low grade depression and numbed bitterness. He's too exhausted and beaten down to even pitch a fit anymore over Ennis’s dispassionate response to the news about Jack’s surgery and the delay in seeing each other again. I think we like to believe that Ennis upon hearing that Jack is about to go under the knife would show more concern but when you take a hard cold look at the OS is there really signs that Ennis would have dropped everything to come to Jack’s aid? I don’t think so, thus how you created Ennis’s response is realistic rather than idealized. I also like the bit of stubborn streak Jack displays with his decision to not make a fool of himself by going to Riverton again. There is a certain stubbornness in Jack, he stubbornly clung to his dream in spite of all the evidence that it was foolhardy to do so, thus to have Jack’s stubbornness manifest it’s way in a different manner seems very realistic

[o2binla]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it! Jack would pitch a fit if he thought it would get him anywhere, but he knows it won't... As for Ennis, I'm not sure how much concern he'd be willing to show, and I figure he's pretty pretty freaked out about what Jack's new life might entail. I hadn't thought of Jack's reaction in terms of his stubborn streak, but you're right... he tries to keep his pride as intact, despite all the humiliation this relationship throws at him sometimes.

[ramona4jake]

Obviously Ennis doesn't deserve Jack ! And I really hope that his non-relationship with Tyler becomes more serious, and after his surgery he leaves with him to California.... and cuts any contact with Ennis ! That's what that cold heart deserves !! I don't know, I'm so mad at this Ennis, he's way too cold !!
I like your story very much, I hope Jack does something for himself !

[o2binla]

Now you are making me feel kind of badly for Ennis! :-) He's not there for Jack, and Tyler looks interested in picking up the slack. I'm no sure Ennis' reaction is so much due to coldness, however, as fear over Jack's new life and uncertainty over what to do about it...