Title: Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 5
Description: Canon AU beginning in 1983; Jack leaves Texas instead of dying.
Warnings: MO!Jack. More Jack coping than just plain forgetting about Ennis, but this story includes an *explicit* non-J/E pairing, in this chapter. Feel free to skip it if you hate that.
Comments: Much appreciated.
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the sex with tyler wasn't thaaat explicit! but it was enough. loved the line about the moon, and the air feeling like it might snow. loved the details... his father's abuse, the airplane ride stirring up bittersweet memories of mountain ranges when joseph pointed them out, the deliberation in signing the card, "yours, jack."
it's moving on jack, but ennis is definitely still in the cards. and it's so crushing to think they might be spending a whole year apart.
He was nine hours closer to Ennis now, but evidently their lives were further apart than ever.
shit, that's hard. :/ thank you for updating your story!
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i *almost* need a visual for tyler. is there an actor/athlete/celebrity that you can think of that resembles how you see him when you write? please don't say johnny depp, LOL. ;)
nice to hear from you!!
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It's great to hear from you too. :-)
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Your characterisations, dialogues and inner thougths feel so real.
One of my favourite passages:
He cursed himself for having hoped just a little, again. Didn't seem possible that it had been seven fuckin' months -- more than half a year! That could take his breath away, as the thought of a single month's separation used to cut right through him. Course, he'd spent the first part of last summer feeling like he might never see Ennis again... Was he getting better with the pain, or was he still just numb?
Eloquent and moving,
Thank you so much,
Paola
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Hope we'll be getting a new chapter soon!
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Glad you're liking it! RL made writing impossible for a few weeks but I'm writing again now and should be able to post ch. 6 in the next couple of weeks.
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