Comments | of_hearts: two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl, chapter 4

of_hearts

two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl, chapter 4

Nov 03, 2009 22:58

Glee. 3,508 words. I don't know how this ended up so long! I kinda had to sacrifice Puck's inner monologue-ish third person narrator for this chapter because I had too much Rachel stuff going on and dialogue and I'm bad at multi-tasking :( But have no fear, it should be swinging back around next chapter. Thanks so much for all your continued ( Read more... )

ship: puck/rachel, fic: post-ep, tv: glee, glee: mash up, multi chap: two lost souls

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funkyinfishnet November 4 2009, 11:43:08 UTC

Oh so good! And this is going to end badly Puck, unless you man up and tell her the truth. Loving your work. This is all so wonderfully in character. Awesome job as always :)

greydawning November 4 2009, 15:39:06 UTC

Okay, am I the only one who totally LOL'd at the image of Rachel singing Back That Thang Up? XD

Unf. Puck in a tight tee. 'Nuff said.

Wonderfully in character and Puck is so obviously in denial, it's cute ;) Awesome, awesome chapter, as usual.

unequivocally November 4 2009, 17:43:51 UTC

SHE TOTALLY JUST SAID PENIS. WHY DID HE FIND THIS SO HILARIOUS?
OMG I CANT STOP LOLING.

Love this fic! Fantastic job, and Puck is just to die for. Absolutely hilarious.

Also--Puck was all a-good-offense-makes-a-good-defense, and she was all it-doesn’t-matter-who-wins-or-loses-its-how-you-play-the-game.--is a fantastic summation of their friendship. Just perfect.

munchlettebelle November 4 2009, 18:27:55 UTC

I like that Puck doesn't even wait for her to finish talking once he realizes what she just means. He just starts making out with her. Which is why I like Puck. A little less conversation, a little more action... Or, you know, a lot more action. ;)

I also like the really honest way that he tries to help her with her hormone issues and especially the moment when Rachel realizes that he's giving her this terrible advice because it's what he does himself, which takes the insult out of it. It was heart-wrenching.

I can't wait to see how their FWB relationship progresses...

cait_linders November 5 2009, 03:39:03 UTC

This story is so fabulous!

I think you're ranking right up in the top for writers of this pairing, & believe me, I've read A LOT of this pairing! lol

Your characters are spot on, but you still have your voice in there & I can't get enough!! lol

When can we get a chapter 5?! I definitely want to know what happens next ;)