FIC: "Alone in the Crowd."

[okuribi]

He couldn’t breathe.

Surrounded in the dying embers from the towers around him, his entire vision obscured in red, he found himself gasping for air, his lungs screaming for the oxygen that would not come. He was trembling visibly, face turning pale, as his parted lips drew in mouthfuls of oxygen in order to satisfy his starving body. It was not

Comments

[melodybutterfly]

Wonderful writing, as usual! (^_^) You did an awesome job. ♥

[okuribi]

Thank you, love! ^^/ ♥

[okuribi]

Really? ..Aa, that was the effect I had aimed for. Thank you. ;~;

[poisonkira]

OMG. That was beautiful. The desperation and the rawness and *ded* Gorgeous, *wipes away tears* We're always listening to you Ruki.

[okuribi]

Yes! We're always listening to him. We can hear and feel that pain his expresses, something that I would imagine he knows and goes his best to express to us, too.

Thank you for your comment! ♥

[starbeams]

[okuribi]

Really? T__T Thank you.

Ah yes! I'm doing it for 30emotions! It's a really good community that explores the emotional aspect of fanfiction! I highly suggest it. XD It's the first one in a string of challenges that's inspired me to keep going. ^^

[starbeams]

[celestialshade]

This was amazingly raw and powerful, just what was needed. Well done.

[okuribi]

Thank you so very much. (_ _) It was exactly what I was aiming for with this. I'm glad this was seen in the writing. I appreciate your comment! ♥