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thelasteddis March 24 2011, 04:05:08 UTC
I like these short pieces you've been doing, lots of fun to read. :-)

I know exactly the feeling you're talking about here! You know your lines, and they're rushing through your head at a million miles an hour and then suddenly, with or without a trigger, they're gone.

Although Theo committed a bit of a theater faux pas here; after the stage manager said, "We're on in five" (actually, "five minutes to curtain" might be more accurate for a stage show) he should have replied with "thank you, five" to show that he heard. Sorry, I'm a nitpicky theater geek. ;-)

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openedlocket March 24 2011, 12:27:38 UTC
Woah, thanks for the correction. Never being in a play, I actually wasn't sure whether that first line was correct.

I'll go off to edit that now :D Thanks!

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xalter_egox March 24 2011, 12:42:07 UTC
Another hundred-word creation? :O That's amazing~ How you manage to create a short, simple, yet beautiful piece in a few sentences will never fail to amaze me. ;)
I like Theo's name. :P I very much love the concept of this one. He's being so pro with what he's doing, yet Leah's pre-play greeting caught him completely off guard. It's cute!
And is that really how to spell gitters? I would have spelled it as jitters =))
Keep up the good work!

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openedlocket March 24 2011, 14:25:28 UTC
Thank you >:D<
LOL Theo's name just came to me. And Leah was probably from me watching Star Wars ;) He's so flustered though. It's cute.

OOOOOOH GOSH
EDITING IMMEDIATELY

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pipisafoat March 28 2011, 21:25:35 UTC
Aw, Theo! *hugs him*

Well done - thanks for sharing! :)

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openedlocket March 28 2011, 22:05:12 UTC
Thanks!

Poor Theo, though. I don't think he's as confident anymore.

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missflyer March 29 2011, 16:56:51 UTC
I hope that those butterflies calm down quickly so that Theo can remember his lines! I wonder if Leah is aware of her effect on Theo?

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openedlocket March 29 2011, 20:04:59 UTC
I hope so too. He's a main character after all. We wouldn't want him to ruin the play ;)

I'm not so sure myself. I don't THINK she does, but I could be wrong. These characters have a mind of their own.

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rubyelf April 2 2011, 01:17:31 UTC
Yay! Edit ( ... )

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openedlocket April 9 2011, 19:11:17 UTC
Alright, I'll change that.Something was bothering me with that line when I wrote it so I think that'll fix it.

I was thinking of writing more about Leah, and if I wasn't under the word limit, I would've. But then, I thought it would be fun to leave people guessing for a change :))

I glad I managed to capture that feeling. I think it's one of life's biggest thrills, to completely blank out for a bit when it really matters most. It's great that a lot of people could relate to that.

Thanks for the edit! And I'm sorry for the late reply :D

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