TRANSLATIONS, Part I. -- Переводы, Часть I.

[origa]

These are all the haiku in English and Russian. Some statistic, as always: 145 poems by 62 poets from 22 countries. A deliberately modest numbers this time as I am in time-trouble (Zeitnot) -- THANK  YOU all, dear haiku friends!  Please take your time to read the four parts of the translations and discuss all the poems, choose your favorites. I'll

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My favorite in part I

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midday heat -
a mustang herd
brings the wind

Very suggestive and dynamic, the wind, the freshness, the freedom brought by herds.

Re: My favorite in part I

[origa]

Thanks, Cristina! Hope Valeria sees this :)

[stefan11]

Some of my favorites in this set:
sudden halt -
the mustang’s heart
keeps running

midday heat -
a mustang herd
brings the wind

Valeria Simonova-Cecon, Italy

I love the contrast between the heart's running and the sudden halt. Also, mustang heard bringing the wind, what a great image and metaphor.
ever higher
on the wild horse’s back
only the sky

Marina Darenskaya, Russia

Being covered only by the sky, wow, that's true freedom. I envy this mustang (in a good way).
longing for blue heaven
mustang’s dream goes wandering
over a field of summer grass

Kyoko Shibata, Japan

Very nice! (Though, why not to simplify and say "dream wonders" or "dream wondering" (without goes) and "over summer grasses" (without field). Just some questions. )

for your question

[stefan11]

Dear Stefan-san

Thank you very much for your nice impression for my haiku. I'm so honored! This time I wrote "honkadori" styled one. So, both of "dream goes wondering" and "over a field of grass" are simply from original lines of Basho's last poem. I'm so glad this one is one of your favorite! Thank you again!

Kyoko Shibata (^-^)

Re: for your question

[origa]

Kyoko, this is not the only comment on your haiku -- I hope you find others! :)

Thank you!

[stefan11]

Oh, really?? Thank you very much for giving me such a thrilling moment, dear Origa! Your contest is really nice! (^-^)

My Part I Choices...

[kathyunguyen]

Looking for the summer kigo in all of these 'ku even though there are many lovely ones, I have to say that these are my favorites from Part I:

midday heat -
a mustang herd
brings the wind

***

lifting higher
the hoofs
of midsummer heat

***

longing for blue heaven
mustang’s dream goes wandering
over a field of summer grass

Re: My Part I Choices...

[kathyunguyen]

Thank you very much, alotus poetry-san! I'm glad one of your favorite haiku is mine!

Kyoko Shibata (^-^)

Re: My Part I Choices...

[origa]

Kyoko, alotus' name is Kathy, she is also my FB friend -- I think you will like to be her friend, too :)

Re: My Part I Choices...

[kathyunguyen]

Kyoko-san. Yes, there is something traditional about your 'ku. Love it!

[ex_jpit]

В этой части больше всего понравились:

внезапная остановка --
сердце мустанга
продолжает бежать

жажда свободы
молодой мустанг наперегонки
с воздушным шаром

дикий простор
несомненна свобода
мустанга и шара

небо и губы
летний ветер в цветке
в руках девушки

взлетая к солнцу
дикий мустанг мечтает
о том же, что и орёл

[origa]

Спасибо, Аня! :)

my favorite is Megans McGowan UK

[anonymous]

my favorite is Megan Mc Gowan UK
heaven worlds melt
into the horizon
unfetttered flight

Re: my favorite is Megans McGowan UK

[origa]

Thank you, someone from California! :)