Comments | ornobodywill: [Fic] God help the outcasts, hungry from birth. Show them the mercy they don't find on Earth.

ornobodywill

[Fic] God help the outcasts, hungry from birth. Show them the mercy they don't find on Earth.

Nov 21, 2009 20:06

OOC: For magi with the prompt, Friendly fire; that's a funny term, like "Civil War." ...I swear it was gonna eventually fit the prompt... Maybe.Tara Stabler was an Angel of Knowledge who didn't make a damn bit of sense and Mac hated her ( Read more... )

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pplrunincircles November 22 2009, 03:36:50 UTC

*flails* Baw, Mac!

I really liked this insight into her past. I think that was really interesting and fun to see, and yeah, I like when we get to see into what characters were like before we knew them. Kind of deal. Oh, man, that was a long ramble to say a little thing.

I love the format of this fic! I think it works so well to have the repetition of that line with a slight change every time to show in this quick, hard hitting way the development of their relationship over time.

Tara left her about forty notebooks with anecdotes and stories and journal entries from her entire life in the military, in the hopes that Mac would get them published for her one day. To this day, they're still sitting in a storage unit somewhere, because Mac can't bear to think of Tara's story being over.

My FAVORITE part of the whole piece. Just... that last line is idk. I wish I had words to describe why I love it so much but I do. I really do. Great insight into Mac as a character and hell, Tara, too... but especially Mac.

kawaiispinel November 22 2009, 05:06:05 UTC

*GNAWS ON* Thank you so much. <333 ^__^ I'm bit on repetition in fics because it's such a simple way to say a lot and I don't start going off-tangent LIKE I DO, and I'm always happy when people think I pull it off, BECAUSE IT IS SURPRISINGLY DIFFICULT. XD <333

allfireburns November 22 2009, 05:00:52 UTC

Oh, Maaaac. I really love the way Mac interacts with people in general, because it's always entertaining and adorable and MAAAAC.

I love the structure of the fic - repetition makes me happy (as I'm sure you know, since I pull that SO VERY OFTEN). My favorite part was definitely the third bit, with the firefight. I don't know, but any time military kids get pinned down somehow in a fic, I get all giddy and "awwwww".

ornobodywill November 22 2009, 05:04:42 UTC

XD I LOVE REPETITION TOO (obviously). Mostly because it reminds me that there's a POINT to these sectioned fics, otherwise I just do weird shit that just don't make no damn sense. :|

XD <333 Thank yooou. I love Mac so much and it is SURPRISINGLY HARD to write angsty fic with her in, because she's so... Belligerently NOT ANGSTY. Not happy, of course, but not ANGSTY. (So we gave her an angstpit for a ward, GO US.)