Fic: Semisonic (Veronica/Logan) R

[oz_black_cat]

Title - Semisonic

Rating - R
Word Count - 1,095
Summary - This fic was written for vmfic_gameon's "Back to School" Challenge. File it under, "But, that didn't really happen!" Takes place at the start of Neptune High's Sophomore year. Lily is alive and Duncan doesn't exist.
Spoilers - None
Disclaimer - The cast of Veronica Mars belongs to Rob Thomas, but mostly he

Comments

[zombie_matrix]

Okay... I don't get it. Who's point of view is this from? I liked this until the end part, when it got really confusing. Maybe I'm reading it wrong, but did you switch who the story was about at the end? That doesn't make sense.

[oz_black_cat]

Hmm.. maybe there's a reason I have things beta'd. The story is always from the viewpoint of Cassie. She's watching them, it's not from Veronica's viewpoint.

[zombie_matrix]

Oh. Well in that case you not only failed, but epic failed. It seems like it's from Veronica's point of view. If it was from Veronica's point of view I'd say it's not bad, but this way? What is the point of this story exactly?

[annie_oakley]

Re-read it. It's supposed to seem like it's from Veronica's POV though it's not. It snaps together in the end- the POV is actually from a third-party who was watching them together. This original character has a crush on Logan and now knows the secret that he's hooking up with Veronica.

I'd be careful about how you phrase your comments, man. There's constructive criticism and then there's flaming, and yours is bordering on the latter, which really isn't cool.

[fire_fly_stare_]

This is really, really cute. I always love a fic where Logan and Veronica get together pre-series.

I don't know how others will think - everyone's different and all that - but I wasn't confused. I actually liked that it was someone else watching them; it makes it more tawdry. :P

[oz_black_cat]

Phew! Thanks for the comment. I was beginning to think maybe I should delete it if it wasn't clear! I wrote it at like 1am last night :)

And, ps I can totally hear you say that last word in a Cliff voice ;)

[isdon_isgood9]

Ok so when I first read this I was like 'What? This makes no sense what so ever.' So when fics don't make sense I usual go and reread them straight away to see if that will help. And I'm telling you now that you need to put a note telling people that they need to reread it if they're confused cause now I've reread it it's kinda brilliant. I the love the LoVe stuff and that's well written as always but it being from Cassie point of view kinda made the piece.

So well done for writing something a like outside of the box. I really enjoyed it.

[oz_black_cat]

Thanks for the comment, I'm glad that you appreciate I was trying to do something different and took the time to reread it. Clearly there are those here who are not as insightful as you :)

[sanya4]

I loved it! I always enjoy reading fics with a twist and yours was a good one. My only "complaint" is that now I want more--I want to know the backstory (how LoVe got together, are Lilly and Veronica best friends in this 'verse,...) and I want to know what happens in the future (what will Cassie do with the information she has, Lilly's reaction when she finds out about LoVe,...).

Nicely done!

[oz_black_cat]

Haha! Thanks - that sounds like a good complaint! I'm glad that you think that way though as I wanted it to come across as a snapshot. I have enough indepth vm backstory fic going on in my life at the mo, but maybe... you never know... Cassie may reappear :)

[breezy93]

I loved it! And I want to know whawt happens...is she gonna spill the beans or blackmail Logan and Veronica! Good Story!

[oz_black_cat]

Thanks for the comment! You never know, I may continue the story one day :) Glad you liked it.