♬ [FIC] SHINee: Eveready

[paperteuk]

Eveready
PG-13 / 500 words / Kim Kibum (SHINee) ; Lee Jinki (SHINee)

Comments

[hisa_cake]

So is that last half all innuendo? I'm not asking this to degrade your writing or anything; I'm just making sure I'm not missing something in the writing because as far as I can tell (and I've re-read this carefully several times), the book analogies and the use of "his"...yeah. I dunno, I really just want to make sure my eyes and brain are still working properly. ; ;

BUT ANYWAY. I really, really like the second-person POV this is written in; it's really different and interesting. Your language and use of description (there are a couple of run-ons, though) kept me reading and wanting more, too. And just the whole idea of little!Onew and reading books under the covers was...I dunno, nostalgic, I suppose. I just really liked the whole thing. Gad I'm not making sense any more. LONG STORY SHORT, I LOVED THIS.

sdkjfgaskjfbgtl I'm a complete OnKey fan now. xD♥

[paperteuk]

It depends on how you want to take it. I admit it's my way of making up for my inability to write smut, though. XDDD

I usually write run-ons when I'm trying to set the mood and to express some sort of spontaneity. Like, when a person thinks-- or at least when I think, I tend to not think in proper sentences. My thoughts run on forever. So I have quite a number of fics written like this... although now I think it's not working. O_______O

But I swear I don't write like that outside fiction... or internet. lol. *is a MassComm student XD*

Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :D

[theia88]

Honestly, because i'm a bad reader.. I have to read this for few times until i understand the point of this fic LOL...
You are good writer..write more please... ^^

[romanticgraze]

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*speechless*
♥

[avirjin]

I'm sorry Zunni, but I took the beginning of that second half as a sexual innuendo and knowing you and knowing me, I probably shouldn't have. DX!!

I thought the beginning was really cute though. <3. Kiddie!Jinki is such a sight to behold~ as is three KiKi drabbles--wtf woman!? XD How did you know I was having a craving all of a sudden? XDDD

lol at Jonghyun snoring though. <3. Cute work, Zunni~<3.

[paperteuk]

It's my well-I-can't-write-proper-smut-so-make-do-with-innuendos fic. 8Db .... but now that I think of it, I did a horrible thing there: doing parallelism with a childhood memory and sex? DDDD:

I remember promising someone lots of happy!KiKi when I get back and my muses decided to ditch schoolwork and work on fiction writing again so here they are. XD

JH seems the type although I think he'd be singing instead of snoring LOL XD (won't that be really creepy, though?)

[avirjin]

LOL. Yeah. But which is worse, do you think? This or the priest-pseudo-smut fic? xP Geeze, down the road of corruption, aren't cha Zunni~? xP

<3333333. :3

And yeah, it would be creepy, but it's so uniquely Jonghyunish. XDDDD
I think. Hm.

[paperteuk]

I'd say this one is worse because the priest one was only implied and, well, for all we know they might be just playing naked poker or something (and you have to admit, not all priests are really "pure", you know. They're humans. They can give in to temptation too). This one is more... explicit? As explicit as I can make it anyway.

Just imagine KiKi at the verge of their climax when Jonghyun suddenly belts out Replay's chorus. XD

[volatileflame]

aww~ <3