Touch of a Velvet Hand

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Title: Touch of a Velvet Hand
Fandom: Original (Supernatural, if you squint)
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: alcohol, violence
Summary: She cares because she’s paid to, but it doesn’t mean she doesn’t feel sorry for them.
Notes: Written for the March week 2 challenge at brigits_flame, theme “happiness in a bottle”. Title taken from “Happiness is a Warm Gun”, which you can

Comments

I LOVED IT!!!

[esteebee]

I really really enjoyed this week's story. Your writing really captures San's reaction and my idea of him during {spoiler tags}

I loved your descriptions of the bar- especially the line "He’s buff, but his face is gaunt and sallow, like he spends too much time exercising and not enough time eating". I felt that it was exactly perfect!

I also liked how you portrayed his relationship with Ruby, that their connection was special, unbreakable. The bartender's reaction was really great!!

The only improvement I had was to may give her more description. I feel like you paid a lot of attention on her reaction to Sam, not on the character herself. The ending with her deciding to call her sister would be more meaningful if you added a just a bit more about her character or past.

Other than that, I thought it was very well written, and wonderfully Sam obsessed :D

AMAZING JOB!! :D

Re: I LOVED IT!!!

[kuhori_rei]

Yay!! I'm so glad I've finally written something you liked. :P It's been a rough few weeks.

Haha, I thought you might like the Sam stuff. We're such Sam!girls, aren't we? ;)

A lot of people hate the whole Sam/Ruby thing that's going on now, but I kind of like it. I'm not saying "OMG I SHIP IT" because the Wincest fangirls would hunt me down and make me dead, which would suck. But I think their relationship is really interesting--it's not necessarily intimate/loving in the sense that they're in love, but that there's so much trust there and they've both seen aspects of each other that no one else has.

I was actually going for the piece to be more about Sam and his reasons for seeking solace in alcohol, so I wasn't trying too hard to characterize Casey. But you're right, and if I ever do any more work on this I'll probably adjust it so that there's a bit more characterization there.

[merthin]

Nicely written.

[kuhori_rei]

Thank you!

*sniff sniff*

[bethhum]

I love this. It's really touching.

It made me want to cry. You may or may not have noticed (since I'm sitting right across the table from you as I write this).

I love how you describe the bar, Casey, and her job. I also love how you describe her thinking about her sister, and her relationship with her sister. I think it's sweet, and also horribly realistic, how she says she's pretty close, but since her sister has kids they just "stay in touch". Sad but true: that's how life works.

I absolutely love this, and I shall go cry (stupid pms).

Re: *sniff sniff*

[kuhori_rei]

It made me want to cry. You may or may not have noticed (since I'm sitting right across the table from you as I write this).
I know, I saw your face going all wibbly. *hugs*

I'm glad you liked this! Thank you lovely!

<3 <3 <3

[drippedonpaper]

This was beautiful. My favorite of the many entries I have read so far.

I don't drink (by choice) so I expected to hate this but your story gave me a better understanding of why people seek "happiness in a bottle"

Your description of grief pierces right to our hearts. I think all those who lose feel this way:

“But I shouldn’t have let him,” he insists. “I should have done something. Anything.”

And that is the hard part of life. As much as we would have done ANYTHING...even that strong williness...there is nothing we can do.

I can understand the motivation for doing anything to dull the pain.

Your story is beautiful.

PLEASE keep writing.

[kuhori_rei]

Oooh, yay!

I'm not a big drinker either to be honest, but I see enough people at my school starting to drink themselves into oblivion that I know what alcohol does to people. But I can also see from both people around me and my own personal experience why people turn to alcohol for solace.

Yeah, poor boy had a rough few months. :(

Thank you so, so much! I'll keep writing if you keep reading! ;)

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