New-ish poem in progress. Because it's about damn time I do something productive.

Jul 10, 2006 01:13

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superfreak425 July 10 2006, 18:25:53 UTC
Friendship.
No, you don't look like you would have pot.
All the stanzas look fairly similar to me, but I'm not a writer.
Something else productive would be to plan blitzball for tomorrow.

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justosric August 5 2006, 16:18:10 UTC
The poem is looking good. "E" was the only letter that I hadn't seen, and you wrote that one quite well. One suggestion: I think that you use "measured" too much in the "D" stanza- - maybe interchange it with words stemming from "allot" or "breadth" or "proportion."

Ideas for the letter "f":
fondle, fancy, foster, forbidden, forsworn, farthing (which isn't only a coin- - it can mean something of little value), frollic, female/feminine, folio, focus, focal point, forte (musical description perhaps?), etc.

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justosric August 5 2006, 16:18:43 UTC
PS- - Belle and Sebastian was amazing. And you totally smoke pot everyday of your life, don't deny it.

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