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labellementeuse June 8 2007, 22:23:53 UTC
oh man. OK, so, I kind of have been really looking forward to reading this since the summaries were made public, and I kind of made embarassingly high-pitched noises when I saw it was posted today, so um. This is just fantastic and heartwarming and all those sappy schmoopy things, but also really real. I loved that Jensen read The Feminine Mystique and I LOVED that he was training his girls to be feminist and I loved that Jensen and Jared's relationship wasn't, like, it wasn't 100% perfect 100% of the time, that there was conflict and all that kind of thing, but that at the same time there was no need to have Jensen or Jared actually cheat to retain tension and conflict and momentum. That there was no succumbing to the whole, there's tension here and the answer is CHEATING and that will provide the drama for the story. So I just thought that was fantastic, that they had a real relationship and real problems.

And a happy ending. I love me a happy ending. *beams*

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phaballa June 11 2007, 00:44:04 UTC
Thank you so much!! Yes, I really wanted to write something that wasn't angsty or overly dramatic, without being boring or always-happy. I wanted it to be the "what happens next" fic, the thing you'd read after reading a million "this is how they got together" fics. I'm so glad you liked it and that you got that from it. That's exactly what I was hoping for!

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velvetjinx June 8 2007, 22:25:38 UTC
Oh, my god.

I've been waiting for your big bang fic, you know, and now it's here and it was just... gorgeous. Gorgeous and perfect and sweet and the kind of story that's REAL, you know? That you can see happening.

You just... you Win At Life. *toddles off to download the music*

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phaballa June 11 2007, 00:45:59 UTC
Thank you!! I wanted it to feel real, for sure. I wanted it to feel like a love story that could happen to anyone; domestic fiction without resorting to extremes for drama, because real life is dramatic enough in itself, you know??

Thank you again, and I hope you enjoy the music, too :)

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mermaid4fic June 8 2007, 22:31:55 UTC
Wow! That felt so real, with an incredible mix of everyday life, schmoop, angst, and hot sex...and with the bizarre reality of Hollywood off to the side somewhere, intruding like 'noises off' in a play.

I really liked the way you swapped perspectives. You've written them as such boys, lacking in the 'talking about feelings' department, so it wouldn't have worked if we'd had insight into only one character's head.

I also liked the way you gave the girls individual personalities, and made sure they weren't just cardboard cutouts. Little kids can be bratty, adorable, exhausting and remarkably mature...all within the blink of an eye, it sometimes seems! So yeah, you made them real characters.

I really enjoyed this - thanks so much for posting! It was worth the wait :)

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phaballa June 11 2007, 00:47:42 UTC
Oh man, I'm so happy you liked the kids!! I am not a kid-lover (which begs the question, why even WRITE this in the first place :P) so I tried really hard to create OCs that were believable and loveable at the same time.

And yes, they're such BOYS! I didn't want to lose that about them, so I'm glad that worked for you so well :)

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joosetta June 8 2007, 22:38:50 UTC
Oh my god, oh my god, this was beautiful and amazing. I got all teary at the end, how embarrassing.

I don't really know what to say, it just felt so honest, and it was so funny and smart. And it was just the right kind of perfect, because it was real perfect. I LOVE IT.

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madame_d June 8 2007, 22:40:50 UTC
*whispers* I've read the story several times, in several beta stages, and it still makes me teary at the end. Blame it on hormones; works every time. ;)

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phaballa June 11 2007, 00:49:22 UTC
Thank you!! And don't worry, you are not the first person who said they got teary at the end. I remember one of my betas emailing me, saying, "You made me CRY." and I was all, "Oh no, is it that bad??" Heee :P

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madame_d June 8 2007, 22:39:53 UTC
I'm such a fucking sap; I've read this story more times than I would admit to, and it still makes me tear up and aww and melt from cuteness. It's just no fair, you can't do that to me.

"Thank you," Lizzie says. "I look like Daddy, and he's the prettiest ever."

That line, still though, wins hands down. Seriously; best line evah! ♥

AND OH! Now that you posted, you can finally write that scene that you promised me, yay!!!

*draws hearts forever* I love this fic madly. I love that it feels real, that I have no trouble imagining it happening, that you have to write, 'This is not an AU' in summaries, because it makes me giggle but it's so believable, this set-up, and really.damn.sweet.

It's incredible that I still have things to say about this fic, but I just really love it lots. I'm sad like that. *hides under Jared*

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madame_d June 8 2007, 22:41:21 UTC
PS: I still say Jared doesn't bottom enough. *runs away*

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phaballa June 11 2007, 02:55:39 UTC
I know! I am going to have to write a ficlet especially for you, where Jared bottoms one million times :P

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madame_d June 11 2007, 03:19:51 UTC
I'm channeling Sally Field and I don't even care: You like me, you really like me! *draws hearts forever*

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