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piratelf

Work In Progress, Dean Forester Fic, "Army Dean"

Jun 20, 2009 01:49

Hi!

I don't usually do this. I like to post fics, or at least chapters of fics, which are nice looking, easy to read, cleaned-up and complete.

But this time I'm going to show you something that I've been working on for over a year. I call it "Army Dean" though the actual title is "Whatever Happened to Dean Forester?"

What happened to me here ( Read more... )

army, dean forester, gg fic, whatever happened to dean forester?, wip

Comments 35

sidura June 20 2009, 09:45:15 UTC

Is it wrong to like the idea of a Dean/Lorelai pairing more as Dean always seems more his own person when you do those stories. Plus I never think Rory deserved him.

Though I would like his parents to be good guys. Anyway you could start them out bad or trying to get along with him something happens and make them good at the end? Okay just a suggestion.

piratelf June 21 2009, 02:28:30 UTC

Is it wrong to like the idea of a Dean/Lorelai pairing more

Of course not!

as Dean always seems more his own person when you do those stories.

Interesting, thank you! I think that may be because whenever I think of Dean and Lorelai together I always think of their first conversation, and the scene when Dean gets rid of the spider for Loreali, where Dean had actual lines, and wasn't just a straight man, as he often was in scenes with Rory.

Plus I never think Rory deserved him.

I do write Dean/Rory but the way that the writers wrote Rory, I totally agree, she didn't deserve him.

Though I would like his parents to be good guys.

So do you like the scene with his parents in the Rory Version, or the scene with his parents by itself at the end more?

Anyway you could start them out bad or trying to get along with him something happens and make them good at the end?Well in the one with Lorelai, I could have that his parents aren't home and that's why he couldn't stay there. But I really have that one definitely set up to be angsty, ( ... )

sidura June 22 2009, 19:24:57 UTC

I always liked the way you put Dean and Lorelai together, it was like you built on the relationship they had in the first couple of seasons as she was one of the few people in the show to treat him as an equal when they had scenes, even if it was because she wanted him to get rid of a spider ( ... )

piratelf June 23 2009, 01:05:02 UTC

she was one of the few people in the show to treat him as an equal when they had scenes

YES! That's exactly it! And I think that's why she wanted to let him know that just because he and Rory broke up (after the dance marathin) it didn't mean that She and dean broke up. Because I feel like they really were friends, separate from his relationship with Rory. And that is what I build on when I write Dean/Lorelai.

But if you go with Rory that is fine too, especially if you go with the idea of her flirting with him and her knocking her back even if in the end they get together - she really does need to wake up to herself where Dean is concerned.

I agree, she does. I dodn't know if I'll put that in the Dean/Lorelai version or if I'll put that in a completely different fic. Or put it in the Dean Rory fic and make Rory really have to work for him! So Many Options! *LOL* Now you see why I've been stuck with these for over a year. Actually I think it's over two years, but I'm not sure.

To answer your question about Dean's parents I ( ... )

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faye_dartmouth June 20 2009, 13:37:51 UTC

Dean fic!

*LOVES*

And you're not going to write both because...?

I love them both and I love what you've put poor Dean through (though the idea of him reenlisted put my hyper little h/c brain into overdrive with possibilities). I think if I had to pick one or the other in terms of which Gilmore Girl he interacts with, I'd actually pick Rory. Not because of any reason except this: Rory needs to have the wake up call in regards to how awesome Dean is far more than Lorelai. I am a sucker for fics where she has to get how much she missed out on by not staying with him.

That said, I don't care which you do--as long as you write more!

piratelf June 21 2009, 02:50:02 UTC

Dean fic!

*LOVES*

Aw, thank you! I think the same when I see something you've written!

And you're not going to write both because...?

I think I am going to still write both. But my probelem is every time I get them out and look at them, there are so many ways to go with each, that I'm kind of frozen.

I love them both and I love what you've put poor Dean through

Must hurt Dean! *LOL*

(though the idea of him reenlisted put my hyper little h/c brain into overdrive with possibilities)

Oh I've definitely thought of some scenarios with each of them being an Army wife in one way or another.

I think if I had to pick one or the other in terms of which Gilmore Girl he interacts with, I'd actually pick Rory. Not because of any reason except this: Rory needs to have the wake up call in regards to how awesome Dean is far more than Lorelai. I am a sucker for fics where she has to get how much she missed out on by not staying with him.I do agree with that! In fact, I have the idea of a fic with Rory wanting Dean back and Dean ( ... )

lelann137 June 20 2009, 23:23:21 UTC

oohhh, I love them all! I think the Lorelei one is my favorite. very interesting, I can't wait to see more.

piratelf June 21 2009, 02:51:32 UTC

Thank you! Thanks so much for giving them a look! I'm happy that what I do have does look good to someone else!

jessm78 June 21 2009, 00:29:31 UTC

I love these! I honestly can't say which one I like more. I'm such a big Dean/Rory girl, but I find Dean/Lorelai really sweet, and I think you captured that so well in that version. I think it'd be great if you could do both.

I also loved the positive scene with his parents. You could feel the tension between Dean and his parents (or at least him and his Mom) in Tippecanoe and Taylor Too, when he and Rory were hanging out at his house. I agree w/the person who said it would be good to start it out with things not so good between them, but getting better gradually. :)

I also kinda like the idea of Army Dean, too. Man, it's so hard for me to picture him with a military haircut! If Jared ever started actually wearing his hair like that I think I'd freak out, lol!

Great start to these!

piratelf June 21 2009, 03:03:51 UTC

I love these!

Thank you!

I honestly can't say which one I like more. I'm such a big Dean/Rory girl, but I find Dean/Lorelai really sweet, and I think you captured that so well in that version. I think it'd be great if you could do both.

I am going to still try and do both.

I also loved the positive scene with his parents. You could feel the tension between Dean and his parents (or at least him and his Mom) in Tippecanoe and Taylor Too, when he and Rory were hanging out at his house. I agree w/the person who said it would be good to start it out with things not so good between them, but getting better gradually. :)

I think I might put the positive parents in the Rory version. What would you think if he knocked on the door and the positive scene is what happened, instead of the scene I have writen, and Dean is shocked at how much they really have missed him, and really do love him. Then put the starting out bad then getting better parents in the Lorelai one?

I also kinda like the idea of Army Dean, too. Man, it's so hard for me ( ... )

jessm78 June 21 2009, 04:59:33 UTC

I am going to still try and do both.

*bounces excitedly* Yay!!

I think I might put the positive parents in the Rory version. What would you think if he knocked on the door and the positive scene is what happened, instead of the scene I have writen, and Dean is shocked at how much they really have missed him, and really do love him. Then put the starting out bad then getting better parents in the Lorelai one?

Mmm, you know, I like that idea. I can't really say why, but for some reason I think it'd flow better with it being in the Rory version. I don't know if this would work, but in the Lorelai one when they start out bad, he could then find Lorelai somewhere (dunno where... at the inn, at Doose's... somewhere) and they'd talk about it. Maybe Lorelai could give him some encouragement, tell him that things will get better with time or something like that. Whatever you do, I like that idea. :)

*LOL* One of the reasons I went back to look at these again was that at the Asylum convention, someone asked Jared what his worst hair style ( ... )

piratelf June 23 2009, 00:52:53 UTC

*bounces excitedly* Yay!!

But I make no promises as to WHEN this will be! *LOL*

Mmm, you know, I like that idea. I can't really say why, but for some reason I think it'd flow better with it being in the Rory version. I don't know if this would work, but in the Lorelai one when they start out bad, he could then find Lorelai somewhere (dunno where... at the inn, at Doose's... somewhere) and they'd talk about it. Maybe Lorelai could give him some encouragement, tell him that things will get better with time or something like that. Whatever you do, I like that idea. :)

I think I might put all of the fluff in the Rory one and all of the angst in the Lorelai one. As strange as it probably sounds, I am going to keep the same opening scenes, just to show how different things could be when Dean comes home.

No problem! If you need anyone to bounce ideas off or anything like that, I'm more than willing to help. :)

Thanks so much!

Thread 9

geminigrl11 June 21 2009, 05:11:22 UTC

I am just reading these, and although I love both, I agree with sidura. Dean seems so much more free to be himself and appreciated for it with Lorelai (though this may be my anti-Rory bias showing. I never got back on the Rory train, except for Dean's sake, after she let the whole town believe the first breakup was his fault).

The parents being so hostile seems so sad...even though it makes sense in context, I'd hope that maybe they'd be welcoming at first especially, and proud, and then maybe something happens soon after to remind them of all the trouble--maybe even something as simple as them receiving another check.

I LOVE the idea of Dean staying with Lorelai, though!

But whatever you come up with will be welcomed! As long as you are writing more GG!Dean, I will be a very, very happy girl. :)

piratelf June 23 2009, 00:47:01 UTC

I am just reading these, and although I love both, I agree with sidura. Dean seems so much more free to be himself and appreciated for it with Lorelai (though this may be my anti-Rory bias showing. I never got back on the Rory train, except for Dean's sake, after she let the whole town believe the first breakup was his fault).

I'm totally with you there! I couldn't BELIEVE she did that!

The parents being so hostile seems so sad...even though it makes sense in context, I'd hope that maybe they'd be welcoming at first especially, and proud, and then maybe something happens soon after to remind them of all the trouble--maybe even something as simple as them receiving another check.

That's interesting, I'll think about it.

I LOVE the idea of Dean staying with Lorelai, though!

Yeah, I love it too. Especially since I've seen the renovations that Luke did when they were going to get married, there's much mor room that I originally was thinking when I wrote this.

But whatever you come up with will be welcomed! As long as you are ( ... )