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pitza

To shag or not to shag?

Aug 14, 2005 03:01

Title: Charity is the Best Policy, part 3
Challenge: The Clothing Challenge (or for the lack of it)
Rating: NC-17 (porn!)
Pairing: Nick/Greg (CSI)
Summary: At home. Alone.
Warnings/Spoilers: My First Porn (tm). No biggie spoilers. Maybe "Play with Fire", but blink and you'll miss it. Would probably make sense if part 1 & part 2 are read first... ( Read more... )

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Comments 19

kalimyre August 14 2005, 02:39:34 UTC

Eeee! Oh, I'm such a sucker for coitus interruptus. Love that Greg just could not wait another second, and love Nick trying to talk on the phone and watch him at the same time. Standing there all speechless and squirming and isn't that a nice image? Oh yes indeedy.

Also, have some pity on Nick. Let Greg finish him off before they open the door. Some things can't wait. *g*

pitza August 14 2005, 10:54:45 UTC

Oh... will definitely give Nick a chance! Some things really can't wait. Like the thing at the other side of the door for example.

Heh.. Glad you like it, I wasn't even sure how it'll go down. I'm not the best smut writer in the universe. Never mind the universe, in this house. Even my parents write better porn. Not that I'll ever know. But I'm sure they do.

powernthepowder August 14 2005, 04:06:16 UTC

Woah! Thats why we have bathrobes boys! And bedrooms...But i bet the entry way was fun! lol that was awesome!

pitza August 14 2005, 10:56:25 UTC

Who needs bathrobes and bedrooms? *grin* I suppose after all the tedium of field work, living the wild life is all the craze.

Then again, living up to the wild side tends to get a little bit hairy. Like getting eaten by a tiger, for instance. Or visitors coming uninvited (puns or no puns, they are annoying).

kahlualeia August 14 2005, 04:07:21 UTC

Greg, naked and all needy? Very hot image. That'll be on the brain for a while n_n

LOVE the smutty ficlet dearie!

XOX

pitza August 14 2005, 10:57:38 UTC

Thanks, and glad you like it. I'm not quite sure about it. Thought I might just give it a try anyway. Like applying for a bumper sticker type thing.

"I write smut," it said. "Not very good, but what the heck."

serenity151979 August 14 2005, 11:32:15 UTC

I think you write the smut very well! You created a real tension, I loved how Greg just had to carry on, and Nick trying to carry out a mundane task while Greg was doing that to himself, and then the doorbell.... argh! But hot, very hot!

pitza August 14 2005, 18:53:24 UTC

Wheeeee.. thank youuu!

I think Greg is slightly mischievous carrying on by himself. I reckon that it's what Greg would've done after a really bad shift (read: after the shit Nick put him through in the crime scene... heh). Payback a la Greg. But I'm sure he'll sober up and return the favour only Greg can.

Although, writing smut is still an uphill battle for me... You wouldn't believe the time it took to write this one, since I ended up conjuring thoughts for myself and going all over the place.

Thank you again!

realm_of_red August 14 2005, 14:09:39 UTC

Whaddya mean you don't think you write good porn??? That was great! The tension, and the line about Nick's jeans feeling like sin on Greg's bare skin, gah! I love the way you described how Greg is feeling----very descriptive! More please!!!!

pitza August 14 2005, 18:56:17 UTC

*grin* thank you!!

Well, there's going to be a little detour of course, what with the visitor to greet and all that. I'm sure Greg'll want to repay the favour, but...Hmm...

Writing smut is not entirely a pleasant writing experience for me. I know some people get their smut-ideas and creative-smut-juices running like a stream during white-water rafting season, but I'm still trying to find a good place to really call my own smut-paradise (which is weird enough as it is).

But I'm glad you enjoyed it! Will try to do better next time... *grin* But that's a long time coming...

*nods* one of these days anyway....