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[pixiefiction]

All right

Comments

[aylaranzz]

Oh wow. That was amazing. Great job.

[pixiefiction]

You, my friend, are mad fast.

[vicious_lullaby]

This is. This is just.

Yes.

I'm incoherent now.

And there's no word for this except 'stunning.'

[pixiefiction]

A) I barely finished posting that around before I got your comment in my gmail
and
B) said comment made my night. Now I can go to bed with a warm and gooey feeling. I'm so very, very glad you liked it.

[elrondio]

This is amazingly inspiring. You've no idea.

[ekaterin24]

Beautiful, poetic, incredible description. The water/drowning imagery works as a metaphor for their kisses, caresses, and love...

::siiiggh::

Saving this one to my memories (and now I need to read Icarus...)

[secretsolitaire]

I liked this. There are some really lovely moments/images here (see below). To be honest I did find Icarus to be a bit more effective for me personally, perhaps because this one has more of a mix of straightforward narrative and poetic images, while that one worked almost entirely on metaphors and impressions (if that makes sense). But really, I liked both of them!

They race each other down the steps of the tower, tumbling and tangling at the bottom, a heap of legs and skin and half-dreaming bone on the harsh stone floor

"Half-dreaming bone" -- what a fabulous image.