Middle of Nowhere - Chapter 16

[poppyhoney_67]

 
Title: Middle of Nowhere
Disclaimer: These characters are not mine. They were created by Annie Proulx. I make no money from this and don't want to.
Rating: NC-17 for the whole story
Thanks: To Em (smilesalot) for all your help and support, and to Keren for your constant encouragement, it means so much to me. 
Feedback: Oh yes please!! I appreciate

Comments

[camillar]

OMG! This is so not good! Well, I mean the story is good, great really, but the Ennis breaking up with Jack and then Jack diving into the water, that is not good at all! Fix please?
Camilla

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi Camilla,thanks for your comment,no things are not good right now, but hang on, I am going to try and fix it.

[denim_girl2006]

Oh dang, that was really sad...............I thought the conversation in the workshop was excellent, very real and believable, and sad!!! Then that ending, wow, that was even more sad. I can see how this would all happen for two reasons, one, the relationship would be difficult to carry on when camp ended without some major upheaval in the boy's lives which I had been worried about from the start, and two, the fact Ennis is unsure about Jack and if he someday would want to date girls (thank-you Carrie and Cindy - NOT). I was at least glad Ennis could see he would never want Alma and told KE in the letter. When the chapter ended my stomach sank because I wanted more! Was hoping it wouldn't end on such a downer. :(

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi denim_girl, I'm really sorry that the chapter ended on a downer. It was just the way that it went, there was nothing positive going on with them at that point. Thanks for your kind words about the workshop scene, it was hard to write but I'm so glad it worked. I'll be updating as soon as I can.

[lv2walk]

Wow, I'm reading comments from everyone and can't wait now to go up and read. I was so excited to see a new chapter as this is one of my favorite stories. I love someone's comment about Ennis just being Ennis. Don't you, tho, just love that guy? I tell you what, I liked him in BBM, but after reading fanfiction, I have really grown to love his character more. It has just helped to expand on his uptightness, his shyness, his deep love for Jack that he can never speak on & has so much trouble expressing. Thanks for the update; now I'm going up to read and I'm prepared for the angst. One thing about angst; it usually leads at some point to some great makeup sex!

[poppyhoney_67]

Iv2walk, thanks for your comment. I hope you enjoy the chapter! Well, enjoy is not the right word, I don't think. But see what you think yourself.

[bbmjack324]

You weren't kidding about the angst friend. Jack's despair combined with the liquor and cold coud Be deadly. Very dark and scary.

ack ignored him, plunging back into the murky depths of the water, dark and cold now, just how he wanted it to be. He heard his name being called, but it was not sweet whispers he could hear, but strained, anxious words.  But he didn’t care, not any more.

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi bbmjack, thanks for your comment, had to give the angst warning, as we are not all a fan of that. Yeah, Jack is in despair, but I'm writing the next chapter and hope to make Jack feel better very soon. Thanks for reading.

[adahleah]

wow that was an intense chapter. Poor Jack and Poor ennis, if only they would talk AND listen to each other:(

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi adahleah, thanks for your comment, yeah it sure was intense, things are not good right now. But things will get better, I promise.