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por_queeee

A Brief Acceptance (5/?)

Apr 05, 2009 21:53

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watchmen, fanfiction, slash

Comments 11

cheesy_mistress April 9 2009, 11:04:38 UTC

Omg... That was... Yeah. Good. Nice- amazing. Beautiful!

Ahem. My mind is still mush.

Update soon dammit!

por_queeee April 9 2009, 16:17:49 UTC

Why thank you! There should be an update sometime this weekend.

beautiful bookmoths April 11 2009, 22:51:15 UTC

I loved this. I'm so glad you're sharing it. I wasn't sure you'd be able to top the last line of part 4. But this part had so many perfect lines! You wrote the sex so well. It's awkward and sweet and violent tender - what I'd expect from two men for whom violence is a way of life, who can't / don't communicate with each other, and who have such an interesting power dynamic ( ... )

Re: beautiful por_queeee April 12 2009, 19:31:50 UTC

Thank you very much, I really enjoy getting well thought-out comments like this letting me know what I'm doing right or wrong.

Particularly I agree with what you said about men identifying as "not gay" but still having sex with other men; I guess I picked up on this because I have several friends who are like that, and I think that's how Rorschach would think if faced with a situation like this.

lilsi April 12 2009, 23:07:07 UTC

Ahh beautiful, my stomach had little butterflies fluttering around while reading this! Excellent writing, can't wait for the next chapter :D

Quite interesting... blackmetalfang April 16 2009, 02:04:23 UTC

I really don't know what to say... it was both beautiful...and...factual...so innocent...and so obviously not.
I was thinking about how I'd write...about such things. How do you say certain things without sounding too professional or something...and at the same time... not too crude to be taken seriously. There is real...raw emotion in the stories needed to be told...but I'm just afraid I won't capture it in the right light. You wrote this chapter wonderfully... Keep up the marvelous work ^^

Re: Quite interesting... por_queeee April 16 2009, 19:31:09 UTC

Thank you very much dear <3. Don't worry, I'm sure you'll do wonderfully! It just takes some building up to, and you need to make sure you detail more than just the sex, and make sure the character's emotions shine through.
If you ever need me to beta a story you've written I would be delighted. Just ask!

Re: Quite interesting... whystherum May 2 2009, 23:29:58 UTC

now woulnd't it be interesting to read this from Walters POV...... just saying....

Re: Quite interesting... por_queeee May 3 2009, 03:14:41 UTC

I'm actually a bit intimidated at the prospect of writing Walter's pov, but I do plan on it for a later chapter.

Thread 5

anonymous August 19 2009, 14:29:49 UTC

"He wraps an arm around Rorschach’s waste."

I think you mean "waist" ;)

Love the story!