Chell/Wheatley, AU endgame
anonymous
May 10 2011, 09:38:07 UTC
Instead of leaving Wheatley to drift in space and letting Chell simply leave, GLaDOS sees a chance to punish them both by rescuing Wheatley and putting him in the body of a human who was in cryo sleep. Nothing's worse than being forced to wander around the middle of nowhere with the world's biggest idiot to torment you, right?
Bonus points if it leads to Wheatley starting to look at Chell in a new light and growing completely confused - but aroused - by these new feelings.
Re: Along the Road - 3.5
anonymous
June 27 2011, 04:40:37 UTC
I love this, just so you know.
It's touching, and even if it isn't sad, it's heartbreaking. probably because so much feeling is conveyed. and for a shrivled heart like mine, it's overpowering.
Re: Along the Road - 3.5
anonymous
July 10 2011, 17:42:18 UTC
I absolutely love this, just like everyone else has already said, and I sincerely hope that you continue. This is so beautiful and poetically written. It can be heartbreaking and wonderfully uplifting, and I would love to read more, provided you continue writing.
Someone mentioned earlier that this could be published as a standalone story, as long as you didn't mention that it was a Portal fic - you seriously could.
Re: Along the Road - 3.5
anonymous
July 10 2011, 17:46:00 UTC
One of my favourite things about this story is how absolutely pure their love seems to be. Most Chelley fics tend to be just about sex, and are written for the sake of being as smutty as possible. Don't get me wrong, I like my smut, but I also love how tender and adoring you potray them as.
Re: Along the Road - 3.5
anonymous
July 10 2011, 20:18:52 UTC
Your stories are so epic! I love how tender and loving this one is... Their love is so beautiful. I've read it like 4 times now. Really amazing. :)
Also, not sure if this was at all intentional, but every time I read the bit about Chell teaching Wheatley how to do cartwheels I can't help but think of this: http://youtu.be/iLUImqsoX7I
Re: Along the Road - 3.5normandplumeJuly 19 2011, 02:23:58 UTC
Waugh, long time no post! First, thank you all for those wonderful comments. ^_^ I can't do justice to how awesome you all are. :)
To everyone who's been saying this would make a good bit of original fiction, thank you! :) I've been poking at it off an on to make it so.
Regarding Smerch doing a cartwheel: you aren't the first to say that, anon, but I actually didn't get to see that clip until some days after I wrote that scene. XD It is an amazing thing to behold. :D
Re: Along the Road - 3.5normandplumeJuly 19 2011, 02:28:21 UTC
Whoops, also wanted to say that I want to continue this series, but I so far only have the one idea and it's a very depressing one at that. Granted, I never intended this set of chapters to be in any sort of chronological order, but still... Do you guys want the horrendously sad idea or would you prefer I save it until after I've come up with a few more fluffy ones?
Along the Road - FinalenormandplumeAugust 10 2011, 05:22:54 UTC
And here it is, my lovelies. This isn't how I would have liked it to end, but it really was inevitable. Words could never express my gratitude to all of you for reading these fics and inspiring me to write so much. Thank you guys!
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She smells terrible and the day is hot. Her clothes are frayed and filthy. There are small noises everywhere that used to make her jump and yesterday she was looking for an escape route, wishing there was still a gun to make a hole she could crawl out through. He counted stars and held her hand until the night was more quiet than she'd ever heard it.
The shovel stands tall in the fresh-turned earth, the only marker she can leave him. A hot breeze rustles the wheat, brushing against a face lined with years and toying with hair more gray than black. Unchanged, the shed in the middle of the wheat beckons to her and she is not surprised to see a lift waiting inside. She does not look back as the door slams behind her.
There are no words passed between them when they meet again in her chamber. Perhaps
( ... )
Re: Along the Road - Finale
anonymous
August 10 2011, 16:22:07 UTC
What a beautifully written, heartbreaking and yet ultimately inevitable ending. Ah well, we all need a good cry once in a while. I like how it became almost faustian in the end, where GLaDOS gives Wheatley to Chell, but in return, once he dies she gets to keep Chell forever.
Will you be turning your talents to any other fills? I would love to read more of the subtle, classy yet totally hot way you have of writing about Chell bringing Wheatley off...
Re: Along the Road - FinalenormandplumeAugust 11 2011, 00:30:18 UTC
Thank you very much. :)
I don't have any plans to continue with more fills, alas. Ironically, I'm an asexual lesbian, so while I find this sort of writing to be a fun challenge, it's also very draining. I wanted to at least finish this one, though, since it resonated with more people than any of my other Portal-based fics. I posted all of my Portal fics to my FF.net account if you're curious about some of the other fills, though. :) http://www.fanfiction.net/u/27390/Razzek_Mecotl
Re: Along the Road - Finale
anonymous
August 11 2011, 04:42:17 UTC
Loved every chapter. This was heartbreakingly beautiful.
You have a great way of showing the passage of time (and implying what goes on and how characters slowly change) by little details rather than explicit statements. It makes your writing so much more poignant, and it was often those details that made me cry.
Your writing style does leave some (minor) ambiguities (although maybe that's just me), but that doesn't make it any less beautiful.
Re: Along the Road - Finale
anonymous
August 11 2011, 04:54:32 UTC
Heartwrenching and beautiful. The connections between chapters are subtle and heartbreaking. (Read the first sentence of the first chapter and then the first bit of the last one. You'll see it.)
You are amazingly talented, and I'm going to go finish my cry now.
Bonus points if it leads to Wheatley starting to look at Chell in a new light and growing completely confused - but aroused - by these new feelings.
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It's touching, and even if it isn't sad, it's heartbreaking. probably because so much feeling is conveyed. and for a shrivled heart like mine, it's overpowering.
but seriously, this is amazing. <3
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Someone mentioned earlier that this could be published as a standalone story, as long as you didn't mention that it was a Portal fic - you seriously could.
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Also, not sure if this was at all intentional, but every time I read the bit about Chell teaching Wheatley how to do cartwheels I can't help but think of this: http://youtu.be/iLUImqsoX7I
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To everyone who's been saying this would make a good bit of original fiction, thank you! :) I've been poking at it off an on to make it so.
Regarding Smerch doing a cartwheel: you aren't the first to say that, anon, but I actually didn't get to see that clip until some days after I wrote that scene. XD It is an amazing thing to behold. :D
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She smells terrible and the day is hot. Her clothes are frayed and filthy. There are small noises everywhere that used to make her jump and yesterday she was looking for an escape route, wishing there was still a gun to make a hole she could crawl out through. He counted stars and held her hand until the night was more quiet than she'd ever heard it.
The shovel stands tall in the fresh-turned earth, the only marker she can leave him. A hot breeze rustles the wheat, brushing against a face lined with years and toying with hair more gray than black. Unchanged, the shed in the middle of the wheat beckons to her and she is not surprised to see a lift waiting inside. She does not look back as the door slams behind her.
There are no words passed between them when they meet again in her chamber. Perhaps ( ... )
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Will you be turning your talents to any other fills? I would love to read more of the subtle, classy yet totally hot way you have of writing about Chell bringing Wheatley off...
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I don't have any plans to continue with more fills, alas. Ironically, I'm an asexual lesbian, so while I find this sort of writing to be a fun challenge, it's also very draining. I wanted to at least finish this one, though, since it resonated with more people than any of my other Portal-based fics. I posted all of my Portal fics to my FF.net account if you're curious about some of the other fills, though. :)
http://www.fanfiction.net/u/27390/Razzek_Mecotl
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You have a great way of showing the passage of time (and implying what goes on and how characters slowly change) by little details rather than explicit statements. It makes your writing so much more poignant, and it was often those details that made me cry.
Your writing style does leave some (minor) ambiguities (although maybe that's just me), but that doesn't make it any less beautiful.
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You are amazingly talented, and I'm going to go finish my cry now.
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