Mara Avice

[potcsues]

TITLE: Even Villians Learn to Love
CULPRIT: Coventina Mor
SUMMARY: "Jack Sparrow thinks that the Black Pearl is his only true love... until the fateful day when love itself is found onboard the Pearl itself... lotsa Jack... UNFINISHED"
BEST LINE: "He said that the only true love of his life was the Pearl, yet deep down inside he knew he still had

Comments

[thekow]

*sigh* One day all these Sues will all gather together at once upon the Black Pearl. And then it will tip over and they will all be drowned. And there shall be much rejoicing.

[kijou]

So, being whipped with your boyfriend is a turn on? Okaay...I know who I never want to have a relationship with.

I don't see how this is fanfiction, I have yet to see a canon character. Sure they have the same names, but they don't act anything alike, or even have the same physical apperance. Has this person ever seen copper? How about Jack's eyes? They look nothing alike. Another thing, I don't think this is even the same crew, I mean, Anamaria not mentioned in the story is one thing, but outright saying that no woman was ever a member of the crew? I think this person fell asleep during the movie.

[agnes_bean]

I became very cold and lost consciousness, for what reason I do not know.
Well, she almost sounded like she knew something…maybe you lost consciousness BECAUSE you were cold? hypothermia and all…unless she was wondering why she was cold in the first place? If that’s the case I blame our government for having crappy schools, because, really…

And what’s with the use of “me”? They sound Irish. Did they do that in the movie as much as they did in this fic?

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[pinkalarmclock]

--They hadn't seen a woman for months and now they were all getting restless--

Lol, they sound like my horse and his mates when a mare is lead past their bit of the stable...hehe

--her first mate Zeedu's--

Someone watched the Lion King.

--strait up--

Ohh, like a straight jacket? I'm all in favour of this.

--And then her black eyes met his copper ones--

Sounds like a game of pool to me..lol

--A ship struck by lightning, its rare but he knows it to be true--

No, because lightning only strikes people and snails, not big tall things closest to it?? Take a lesson in Physics. I learnt that in my first class at age 11.

--yer gonna stay out here an' eat food--

Really? I normally scuba dive with mine...

--Imma Captain--

'Irma Captain'? New Sue name.....still doesn't beat Alpha Jessie Iceflake though