Mikayla "Mikky" La Croix

[potcsues]

TITLE: Pirates of the Caribbean The Curse of the La Croix
CULPRIT: Vireyda Magodaly Well, at least this wasn't the Sue's name.
SUMMARY: "(FINISHED) Mikayla La Croix is a Vampire with a curse, its up to Liz, Will, and Jack to break it, some more that others....what will happen when they fail?"
BEST LINE: "'Elizabeth Swann! Bet its Turner now though

Comments

[thekow]

"I AM MIKAYLA LA CROIX! I AM THE UNDEAD! AND I WILL KILL YOU ALL!"

*giggles* She sounds like a godzilla :D

[therikkster]

o.o;

Now Jack, this is where you get out your sword, turn her into vampire sushi and skip off into the sunset..

[farmercuerden]

Oh, dear... You really need to look at the sequel - It's short, but nearly incoherent

Weel... the good part of this story is that it at least has a fairly unique plot. If she learned dialogue, characterisation, realm of probability, use of minor characters, and made it into original fanfiction, she might be able to save it. Yes, I know, that's a lot to ask. Still, I think I'll name her as one of my not-completely-hopeless cases, and offer to help her. There are occassional glimmers of talent under all the awfulness.

[farmercuerden]

Hoorah! A politely-written comment to the author revealed a friendly person who wants to improve, and wants to keep Mikayla from being a Mary Sue, and wants to try and fix the problems in the story. Hoorah!

dsg

[pinkalarmclock]

--And enter a curse, and enter love, and you've got a story--

No, you have a completly whacked-up life.

--covered in sharks blood--

Right, how?? If my experiances with sharks are right, you are not going to be covered in shark's blood after meeting with them.
More likely, you are going to be covered with your own blood.

--redrimmed--

*teehee* makes her eyes sound like a pair of curtains, the new one's that have just been retrimmed. Lol

--I AM MIKAYLA LA CROIX! I AM THE UNDEAD! AND I WILL KILL YOU ALL--

I AM A MARY SUE! i AM A BAD ONE AT THAT! I AM COMING TO POLLUTE YOUR FANFICS!!! FEAR ME!! AHH!!!

now thats scary.

--Mikky--

Mickey Mouse. No comment