Kathryn Belle

[potcsues]

TITLE: Pirates of the Caribbean: The Red Rose
CULPRIT: xKatx
SUMMARY: "Will Turner thought he’d never see his childhood friend, Kathryn, again. She disappeared the day Elizabeth found him floating in the ocean. Now, Captain Jack Sparrow returns to Port Royal with the key to Will’s life-long mystery. Who will fall in love wit"
BEST LINE: "'Well, lad

Comments

[rainbowjehan]

Her long brown hair whipping around her face, her sharp brown eyes taking in the surroundings, and the sea spraying up into her face. She wore black pants and a simple white shirt.

Found: One dependant clause. Free to a good author willing to give it love and care and make it independant.

[megaera_1]

not too bad, but still.

This story isn't technically a Sue, but the random quotation marks and tense switching...

OH GOD THE TENSE SWITCHING!one!!

http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1770332
The summary actually sounds decent. It's not, though

[niav]

Even her hair hates her. It's whipping her.

[ganeris]

I don't know what Sue is getting so bent about. I mean, all being a pirate means is you have random braids in your hair. Poor Mr. Gibbs, though - he'll never be a real pirate. Not enough hair.

And how clever of Jack to plan on attacking a British ship right out of the Port Royal harbor. (What the heck is a mainliner? Is that an actual sailing term, or does the ship shoot drugs?)

[windsong_moon]

Ouch. It. Hurts.

I can't even get through the first part of it. Kudos to you for getting so far.

(But I dare you to read this: http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1782068 . The only good thing about it is that it's short)

[potcsues]

Sadly, I have read that.