My chapter doesn't flow?

[princessfics]

Soooo.....

I've gotten a couple of reviews now that have said something along the lines of...it's not your best, or, it doesn't flow as well....for the latest chapter of Protection (20).  I'm not looking for an ego boost of, oh no, they're wrong and you're wonderful ;-)...I'm just genuinely curious about what is different with this chapter - if

Comments

[birlan]

Hmm. I've looked at it and think there are a couple responses I would make--and I don't agree with the criticism---and please don't feel any need to disclose future story directions after reading this

[luvmybaby101201]

Hmmm. Honestly, the only reason I can think of that someone might think this doesn't flow well is because it's been so long (sorry, sorry, I know it was giving you fits!) since the last chapter that maybe they've forgotten some things. For me, it's not a hardship at ALL to go back and re-read to refresh myself on the details, and that's what I'd suggest to anyone who is thinking it doesn't fit with the rest of the story well.

As far as tone, voice, emotion, plot points, etc. - I see no errors or drastic changes on your end at all. I think you've done a stellar job of maintaining the tone and themes of the story from beginning till now, which can't be easy considering the length of time you've been writing it.

This continues to be just a fantastic story, that I was SO unsure of at first; I am really, really glad I stuck with it!

:)
Melissa

[wvchemteach]

You already know my thoughts on the chapter.

[cocoteo]

I think this chapter flows very well with the rest of the story. The emotional feel and the characters are still 'in character' and the pacing feels similar from the beginning. The only shift I see is that the plot seems to have peaked and now the focus has shifted from constant (and I mean minute to minute) movement to more of an emphasis on characterizations and cleaning up the fall out from all that movement. Perhaps these reviewers in question have become accustomed to such fast paced action that the slower, but so important to the story, emotional clean up is not as important. Less action=Less flow?

I really don't think you have any worries here.

[razzberry_11]

i think it was great...it was a bit different...actually i think it was because it happened a little faster than you normally make it... the part about the weasleys agreeing to lift the curse...normally it would have been more gradual...but i foud it awesome...infact if you would have stretched it...i ont think i could have taken it...hehehe

and another thing...i was trying to open the link to the puff version of chapter 20...but it always displays that adult content notice...n im above 18!!....now what do i do?....please please mail it to me at blueberry_strawberry11@yahoo.co.in...

im getting desperate...i have my exams..and i cant study because of the curiosity...please?????