Closer than Most Prologue

[princessme385]

Title: Closer than Most
Rating: M
Characters: Damon and Elena
Summary: Elena comes back to Mystic Falls after being compelled to stay away and meets the Salvatore brothers all over again.

A/N: Here is the first finished draft of Closer than Most. Let me know what you think or what you would change!

Comments

[scarlett2112]

It was intense Chelley but I think you did a really good job.. It was "graphic" enough I think especially if you're uncomfortable writing "M" like you said one other time.. I think it'll be an excellent story once you start getting into it.... I loved the commencement of it..
Hurry with more....PLEASE! I think all the fan fic writers "evil" Stefan have done a far better job than TVD script writers.. I think ripper Stefan has been beyond lame!!!! Happy Sunday.

[lokya2046]

I think this is really good. I want to know what happened next already.

If you don't feel comfortable to write smut, there is no need to go into detail. A hot and sexy scene may not need to give us all the detail.

I think what you put here is quite okay.

But if you want to explore smut writing or just want to know more, you may take a look at http://smut-tutorial.livejournal.com/, Carly is very good at smut writing.

I like the twist at the end.

Please update soon.

[dutchess_sandra]

Great start, and I agree with Carol and Daisy, the smut had just enough detail to label it as an M story, but was not so graphic that it would make you uncomfortable.

I'm glad you went with the option of Stefan compelling her. It's bittersweet to know that she finally made her choice, and that Damon has found the happiness he so deserves only to have it taken away again.

I would be interested in reading the rest of this.

[siberia21]

Wow, I didn´t expect it to be that intense since the beginning. I liked you started some time before the scene we saw on TV - Elena waiting for his return. Nice surprise you changed the result of the evening but not all of it! I love your brave Elena (with Damon and later with Stefan). I liked Damon´s uncertainty and DEX was perfect, you did a wonderful job. Normally I would say it was rushed (immediately to bed at that moment) but you made it very natural and gave us all the information about Elena´s state of mind and it DID make a perfect sense). After all, that´s why Damon didn´t believe it in the beginning either. WONDERFUL! The evil Stefan... finally I can see him being something and not just lame. Oh my I can´t even think of the torture of waiting for how you would fix THIS for us! Please, please give us more!! Thank you for sharing I really enjoyed.

[jozac2]

This was excellent. The Dex scene was done beautifully. A Romantic love scene with just the right amount of smut. I loved Damon's Hesitance, and Elena's boldness. Well done. Now I really can't wait for the rest of the story.