Comments | prufrock_26: SPN Fic: Chocolate Cake

prufrock_26

SPN Fic: Chocolate Cake

Jul 18, 2012 00:39

Title: Chocolate Cake
Characters: Dean, Sam
Genre: Gen
Rating: G-13 for language and mention of exploding body parts
Word-count: 2212
Spoilers: Set early S6 (pre-6.07), with major spoilers for the end of S5.
Disclaimer: Not min; just hunting Sera Gamble's fictional deer.
Summary: Dean spikes a fever in the middle of a hunt and ends up in a diner ( Read more... )

s6, gratuitous sick!dean, dean, diner, supernatural, impala, gen, fanfic, what is this comfort you speak of?, sam, fever, cake, dean pov

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prufrock_26 July 18 2012, 12:56:30 UTC

Thanks! I've got a weakness for description, but I'm always afraid I'm going to lose people in those long-winded metaphors and similes...I'm glad to hear I didn't lose you.

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prufrock_26 July 18 2012, 12:56:50 UTC

Thanks very much!

honeylocusttree July 18 2012, 12:29:36 UTC

sampling Dean's face like a cheese tray.

That right there? Brilliant!

Ohh soulless Sam, how I hated you in the show, but I could see here why you'd make an effort to keep Dean alive. Actually, though, he came across here as more sympathetic than I was expecting--by which I mean, he came across as slightly sympathetic. At first I was surprised, but it was very IC and his reasoning came through even though Dean couldn't see it.

Dean's angst is so Deanishly angsty. :3 Definitely enjoyable, and every interesting turn of phrase made this more fun than the average sick!Dean fic. The cheese tray line is my personal fave, but there's a lot going on here that's really awesome. I really especially enjoyed Dean comparing himself to various worthless discarded things. Yowch. This man has issues! Which were very effectively communicated. Throwing robo-Sam into the mix added an extra layer to it that made it doubly fun.

Awesome stuff. Very amazing work.

prufrock_26 July 18 2012, 13:35:52 UTC

I have such mixed feelings about soulless Sam. Partly because it felt like nobody could decide exactly what he did and didn't feel - clearly he cared about some things, just not about Dean, which feels very contrived and lazy to me. I wasn't sure how sympathetic to make him (especially as, in theory, he still would have been pretending to be nice Sam), but I'm glad the logic of his character seemed reasonable to you.

Oh, Dean. Your angst, it is fun to wallow in. Add a mind-addling fever and robo-Sam, and I pretty much get to run wild for 2000 words. To the point that, when I was tagging this at hoodie_time, I couldn't decide which varieties of angst to include, because they all come up at some point. Your enjoyment of the cheese tray line in particular pleases me, as that's one of my favorite bits of this fic.

Thanks for the lovely and detailed feedback! I'm so glad you liked this, and that the rambling style worked for you.

darth_firefly July 18 2012, 13:35:01 UTC

Aw... poor Dean...

prufrock_26 July 19 2012, 19:47:23 UTC

Indeed. Thanks for reading!

mad_server July 18 2012, 15:32:41 UTC

Sampling Dean's face like a cheese platter!!! Now THAT'S a forehead feel. I love the hot brick of leather-smelling air inside the car, too. Heeeee.

Also Dean breaking down from the kindness of a stranger... so sad and adorable... and the relief of Sam's big plaid shoulders and then realizing he had been lost... so good.

prufrock_26 July 19 2012, 19:55:55 UTC

I am slowly making my way through every variety of forehead feel known to man. So far, it has been a profitable undertaking.

See, a breakdown like this (or, you know, of any sort) is what I needed so badly out of S6. I'm not even asking for big plaid hugs. Just a little kindness and emotional release. *sigh* Sadly, I've had to take matters into my own hands. I'm glad you approve of the results.