Comments | psycho_angelus: Send in the clowns

psycho_angelus

Send in the clowns

Apr 08, 2006 00:37

This is for joss100

Title: Send in the clowns
Author: killerweasel
Rating: R
Character(s): Lindsey McDonald, Angel
Prompt: 078. Root of all Evil insane challenge
Word Count: 552

AU after Underneath

Send in the clowns

( under here )

Comments 4

elzano April 15 2006, 14:19:10 UTC

Late season five. I don't really know why but I started it in the middle of a conversation. I just had a really pissed off Lindsey in my head... don't know where he came but glad he stuck around for this ( ... )

elzano April 15 2006, 14:19:28 UTC

Angel let Lindsey drop to the floor, a small amount of blood oozed from his neck, his cock, flaccid, limp, hanging from his jeans ( ... )

killerweasel April 15 2006, 14:41:15 UTC

Angel fucking Lindsey’s mouth. His chest heaving from the heady thrill of blood loss and a blowjob.

I think this should be 'Angel fucked Lindsey's mouth. His chest heaved from the heady thrill of blood loss and a blowjob.' The rest seems to all be in past tense, that bit is more present.

killerweasel April 15 2006, 14:36:53 UTC

This should probably be in the same paragraph:
I’m evil, got the hand and job to prove it. So what you got, tall, dark and broody? Huh?”

Same thing for here maybe make it all one paragraph:
You know now much time that is you tin platted, tiny Texan? Seventy three thousand days, one million seven hundred and fifty-two thousand hours, one hundred and five million one hundred and twenty thousand minutes. All evil. And what have you got? Twenty years, max, some tattoos and a law firm?" I think that last sentence was supposed to be in quotes too.