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SPN RPS Fic - An Absence of Rain

Mar 05, 2009 03:04

I dedicate this fic to three people: Victoria, Todd the TA, and of course, Dr. Jellison. Also, first-ever RPF and first-ever slash in general. Wow. Two birds, meet my one stone.

Title: An Absence of Rain
Pairing: J2 (AU)
Rating: PG-13
Notes: Inspired by a comment unreckless made during our History Through Film class after we watched The Grapes of Wrath. Set in ( Read more... )

meanwhile in a parallel world..., ohgodohgodmybrain, so much drama!, fanfiction, a wild secondary character appears!, whatever. idek., that show with the brothers and the car, rps

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gestaltrose March 5 2009, 09:31:08 UTC

oh my this is lovely. Really well done.

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Re: beautiful evocative writing pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:39:17 UTC

Bittersweet--yes, I think that perfectly describes what I was going for. Thank you for saying so!

pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:38:32 UTC

Thank you so much. It means the world to me for you to say so. <3

tsuki_no_bara March 5 2009, 15:05:27 UTC

i love this. the language is gorgeous and spare and evocative and i really like the arc of the boys' relationship and their travels.

pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:46:21 UTC

Thank you! Everybody keeps saying "spare"... I guess I didn't really notice when I was writing--I just used the language that felt right to me. I'm glad there's a word for it, though.

Thank you again; I am delighted to have written something you love!

tabaqui March 5 2009, 18:25:03 UTC

Oh, that's lovely. Such a hard, dreadful, soul-killing time. Beautifully rendered, language and emotion just right for the times.

Now it’s all he dreams about, the dust and the wind and the familiar sky. He wishes he’d never left, but he can’t see any way to ever get back.

So sad and hopeless! But the end is gorgeously hopeful and good - excellent stuff!

pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:40:44 UTC

Ah, I'm delighted you think so! I did want to end on a hopeful note--not out-and-out, because hope is a fleeting thing in conditions like that, but with a touch. And the fact that you picked up on it is very gratifying.

Thank you so very much!

So good, but maybe a bit harsh in language anonymous March 5 2009, 23:57:49 UTC

Reffed from a wandering friend. Glad I read this.

It is a very moving story and rather well thought out. If I had any complaint it would involve the use of the word "cock". Every other mention of affection is soft and deliberate. Cock broke the trance for me and felt a little out of place. A softer, less obvious reference would have played into the whole feeling so well. Resistance to the temptation of using raw or shock language would add to the wondrous magic you weave with your words.

Other than that, I think it rather brilliant.

Re: So good, but maybe a bit harsh in language pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:44:46 UTC

Aw, anon, I wish you wouldn't be anon! I hate not knowing who I'm talking to, and I don't know if you'll ever see this response. Besides, constructive criticism is a good thing!

Thank you for the suggestion. I myself was a little hesitant to use the word when I was writing, and it did give me pause. But the fact of the matter is that I couldn't think of anything else to put in that I thought appropriate. If you have suggestions, I'd love to hear them--I'm always open to friendly advice!

without_me March 6 2009, 07:10:53 UTC

Very lovely. Thank you for sharing this!

pyrebi March 12 2009, 16:47:04 UTC

Thank you for reading it! <3