Creativity

[raheriwesir]

Okay, this came to me a couple weeks ago and can be sung (at least that is how I was doing it). I do not have one creative bone in my body, so any constructive feedback would be appreciated.

Song to Wesir

He will come in the silence.
He will come in the night.
He will come to us all,
and will make everything right.

O Great Wesir,
let me lay my head
agianst

Comments

[darytessekhmet]

Very nice and loving fatherly feel. I really like it.

[shemem]

*wants to hear it*

[shefytbast]

*dittos* ^_^ From just the words, though, it's very sweet. Nice work!

[featherandflame]

i like it a lot! I want to hear it sung, though *wink nudge*

[senuneheti]

I like it :)