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Sherlock Holmes: Miracle

Apr 30, 2011 09:33

Title: Miracle
Characters/Pairing: Sherlock Holmes and John Watson
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~1600
Disclaimer: Not my characters. Not for profit.
Summary: Written in response to this prompt on the kinkmeme:
I would like a story where Watson is critically injured or ill. Holmes abandons Watson, unable to deal with it all.
I would like Holmes to eventually ( Read more... )

angst, fiction, sherlock holmes

Comments 22

donutsweeper April 30 2011, 03:13:32 UTC

Oh this *hurts* in all the right ways. It's powerful and beautiful.

rat_chan April 30 2011, 03:41:54 UTC

Thank you very much. =)

reasonabsurd April 30 2011, 03:29:50 UTC

:( I was expecting it to end like "One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest." I think that would have made me feel better, personally.

rat_chan April 30 2011, 03:44:01 UTC

=C
The ending was supposed to be hopeful. I mean, Watson's only paralyzed, not a vegetable.

reasonabsurd April 30 2011, 23:11:59 UTC

I'd rather die than live like that. But it's your story. :/

rat_chan April 30 2011, 23:58:49 UTC

Well, thank you for the permission and thank you for confirming that you didn't get (or I failed to communicate =[ ) the entire point of the story (that Holmes and Watson could live with him like that -- that Watson was more than his physical body).

For future reference, most writers don't object to CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM. However, I think most people, like me, would feel some degree of hurt/insult at a comment that basically reads "Your story was depressing and I hated the ending." Next time, you might consider softening the blow with even the faintest of praise (like "that was nice, but...") or not commenting at all. It will save everyone a bit of pain.

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tweedisgood April 30 2011, 07:46:24 UTC

"I'll only get in your way - slow you down." "You always did, you know...it never mattered."

Oh. This. Right there. Holmes and Watson in a nutshell.

rat_chan April 30 2011, 09:06:45 UTC

Thank you so much! I am rather fond of that bit myself. <3

tweedisgood April 30 2011, 13:24:28 UTC

It's always nice when people notice the bits you're proud of, isn't it? :-)

spacemutineer May 1 2011, 00:34:21 UTC

"Telling Holmes, with the tears of joy in his voice that he stubbornly refused to shed from his eyes, how glad he was that Holmes was still alive."

I just love that it's this thought that changes Holmes' mind. He had allowed himself to forget for a moment how they'd lost each other so painfully once before and let himself forget what it meant to both of them when they found each other again.

How close he came to making the same mistake twice! But he didn't. No matter what the shell around each of them looks like, it is always Holmes and Watson inside, at heart, and that is all that ever matters. You've crafted such a beautiful, tender work here. Very moving.

rat_chan May 1 2011, 05:15:29 UTC

Thank you very much.
As I've said to you before, I really love canon Holmes and Watson as platonic soulmates and enjoy writing about the bond between them.

goldvermilion87 May 1 2011, 04:14:29 UTC

That was beautiful.

I'd say just leave it as it is... I think more would become possibly maudlin. This is such a complete work to my mind, that continuing it would... cheapen it? (Although, as a grain of salt--reviewers asking for continuations brings out the contrarian in me. :-) )

rat_chan May 1 2011, 05:18:53 UTC

Thank you.

As a lazy person with a short attention span, I don't mind not continuing.
But then again, it would be something different for me... And I would NEVER make it maudlin. I'd balance it between genuine struggles to adjust, real pain and frustrations, and moments of humor and quiet friendship.