His Father's Wand

[readerravenclaw]

I wrote this a while back, all in one sitting, partly inspired by my essay on Neville's Mimbulus mimbletonia and partly just because I really like Neville as a character. Yesterday I took another look at it and did some rewriting, and I've decided to repost and link to a couple of appropriate fanfic communities

Comments

[mona1347]

This is beautiful. I love Gran in this piece. Hard-nosed and strict but she loves Neville and is so proud to see what he's grown into. I love how Neville's magic manifests in his being invisible. I love all of this! Well done! :)

[raviahmad]

She reminds me of MY grandmother. *cries quietly*

[readerravenclaw]

Wow. That means a lot to me - that you think that Neville's Gran came across as "real". Thank you for the feedback. :)

[readerravenclaw]

Thanks. :) The invisible thing kinda just wrote itself; I had never actually had any theories about Neville's magic manifesting itself by making him invisible, whether in general or specifically when the LeStranges attacked. It just fit into the theme/flow of the story. But now that I've written it, I've become quite partial to the theory. :)

[veracity]

"I tried to keep it safe, but keeping Harry safe was more important."
*sniffs* You brought tears to my eyes! That so amazing. Such silent bravery. The way he can manage to hide himself without actually realizing it; to will himself invisible. And the way Gran is short, not necessarily with him but more with the Ministry, seems in character of what we know of her. And she would be proud because he's starting to grow into the young man she was hoping he would be.

Wonderful job.

[readerravenclaw]

Thanks so much for the feedback. It means a lot to me, as my usual writing style is much less... well, focused on emotions, I guess, so this was definitely unchartered territory for me. And I'm glad you think that I characterized Neville's Gran well. Thanks again. :)

[veracity]

*grins* You write less emotional, and I can do is emotion. Emotions can be hard to write though, especially when we're given such tiny amounts of information in canon. Mrs. Longbottom seems tough, but she obviously loves the boy, or she wouldn't have taken such care of him. I really liked that you made that come through. Sometimes authors just write her off as horrid, but you gave her depth.

[magicicada]

This was gorgeous, and Neville’s characterization was perfect. It showed everything I love about him without suddenly making him more assertive and outgoing to get the point across quickly. The moments between him and his grandmother were beautiful without being overstated, and having him magic manifest itself by making him invisible was a wonderful touch.

[readerravenclaw]

Oh good, I'm glad you liked Neville's characterization. I love Neville as a character; I think he's one of the most interesting and well-rounded characters in the books - there's a depth to him, you know what I mean? And it's really nice to know that other people see him as I do, and that I managed to convey how I see him. :)

[readerravenclaw]

That's one of the biggest compliments you can give me. Thanks so much for taking the time to leave feedback. :)

[dolimir_k]

Beautifully told. Very sweet, yet so sad too.

[readerravenclaw]

Thanks so much for taking the time to leave feedback; it really encourages me, and the emotional aspects of my writing is what I'm least secure about, so it's especially encouraging when people tell me that the fic had the "right" emotional affect on them. :)