Application Accepted!reimsadminMay 1 2011, 05:23:06 UTC
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PLAYER INFORMATION PLAYER: Stormy AGE: 22 CONTACT: connects.the.sky@gmail.com PERSONAL LJ: confectionaries CHARACTERS PLAYED: n/a
CHARACTER INFORMATION NAME: Suki Sasaki AGE: 16 GENDER: female YEAR IN SCHOOL: freshman ENROLLMENT: Scholarships. She's pretty poor and a ward of the state of Iowa, but she won a scholarship and is allowed to keep it so long as she maintains a B-average and doesn't get expelled for improper behavior.
APPEARANCE: Suki Sasaki is half-Japanese, half-European American. She has pale skin and small almond-shaped eyes, which are a plain dark brown. Sullen cheeks sink inward, giving her an almost starved look. Her lips are typically a bold pink, round and puckered outward. Her hair, originally black and straight, is often bleached and dyed a bright shade of red. She leaves it long, save for bangs which sometimes grow and fall over her eyes. When the coloring fades, her hair is a tan to auburn shade from the bleach, until her roots grow out too far and she dyes it again
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PERSONALITY: Suki is definitely one odd individual. A troubled girl, she has a tendency to lash out, run away, or threaten; sometimes all three at once. Always one to keep on her own, she's a quiet, odd child who prefers drawing in notebooks or writing (rather horrible teenage) poetry as opposed to taking notes or learning. When she is interested in a subject, however, she'll soak in as much knowledge and learning as possible
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ABILITIES: When she wants to be, Suki is a determined individual. If she states that she wants to do something or is going to do something, then there's a high chance that she will do exactly that. Now, not all of them are positive, but there's no stopping her.
She's also very flexible. Due to running from authority figures and not having good stamina, her thin figure has helped her curl herself up in many balls and tuck herself underneath a desk, or wiggle under a bed, or even squeezing through fence posts. She's not fast but she can bend herself in odd ways to benefit herself somewhere.
She can learn things quickly. Again, this only happens when she chooses to apply herself, but she picks up on things quickly when she pays attention. Because of this, she's found mathematics and chemistry to be her better subjects in school.
WEAKNESSES: Suki, oddly enough, has a lot of these. First - dealing with people. Suki does not connect well with people, so interacting with them is difficult. Given how she uses anger as a first means to
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Application DeniedreimsadminMay 18 2011, 19:03:03 UTC
APPLICATION DENIED After reading over and discussing your application, we have decided that we cannot accept your application at this time for the following reasons:
The Personality Section lack a cohesive nature, making it hard to follow what the character's personality traits are, how they were developed and relate to each other. While it is good to be in depth in this section, the personality presented seems to get hung up on details that are unimportant to the whole and feel disconnected from each other. It does not give us a clear, coherent image of the character you have created. In addition, the personality is at odds with the history, failing to make a believable connection between the behavior he presents and the environment he was raised in.
The AU History is highly unrealistic. We feel that with the type of abuse going on that the character would have been removed from his father's care and the reaction the character has to the events isn't plausible. Being shot at by a parent when nine years old resulting in a loss of body
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Revision RequestreimsadminMay 22 2011, 20:39:58 UTC
REVISION REQUEST After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
Please expand on the Abilities section with more detail. We would like you to give special attention to the observational ability as we're no clear what is meant by it. Also, please add in a little about her computer aptitude.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.
You know, reading this made me question why I had her have that ability in the first place. So thank you very much for that. ♥ I'm glad I had to think about it as it gave me a better understanding of her. So, after almost a week of agonizing over this, I'm finally done revision.
Although, if anything else needs to be changed, please let me know!
Application Accepted!reimsadminMay 27 2011, 20:55:01 UTC
ACCEPTED Congratulations! Your application has been accepted. Please respond with your character's journal name. Once you've completed that, please join reimsacademy, reimsactivities, reimsassembly and, optionally, reimsantics.
Revision RequestreimsadminMay 22 2011, 20:44:53 UTC
REVISION REQUEST After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
The Personality Section doesn't explain why the character dislikes being touched so much. Please expand on this.
In the Personality section there is a reference to a character names Yvonne and that Alyss is very protective to the point of getting violent over her. No where in the AU History is Yvonne even mentioned. Who is she? What is her relationship to Alyss? Why does she react that way in regards to Yvonne? How is Alyss reacting to Yvonne not being at Reims? These are the type of questions we would like to be addressed in a revision of the AU History.
The application references a hacking percentage in the ability section. Whereas we're okay with it being used like that in the application, we eould like to remind you that, if accepted, such percentages or other qualifiers like 'unhackable' are not allowed.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any
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Alright, I'm on the other things, but I did give a percentage in the abilities section. It says in the second line that she wouldn't be able to hack a post past 50% percent. And on the unhackable part, of course. I fully understood and still understand that.
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PLAYER: Stormy
AGE: 22
CONTACT: connects.the.sky@gmail.com
PERSONAL LJ: confectionaries
CHARACTERS PLAYED: n/a
CHARACTER INFORMATION
NAME: Suki Sasaki
AGE: 16
GENDER: female
YEAR IN SCHOOL: freshman
ENROLLMENT: Scholarships. She's pretty poor and a ward of the state of Iowa, but she won a scholarship and is allowed to keep it so long as she maintains a B-average and doesn't get expelled for improper behavior.
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She's also very flexible. Due to running from authority figures and not having good stamina, her thin figure has helped her curl herself up in many balls and tuck herself underneath a desk, or wiggle under a bed, or even squeezing through fence posts. She's not fast but she can bend herself in odd ways to benefit herself somewhere.
She can learn things quickly. Again, this only happens when she chooses to apply herself, but she picks up on things quickly when she pays attention. Because of this, she's found mathematics and chemistry to be her better subjects in school.
WEAKNESSES: Suki, oddly enough, has a lot of these. First - dealing with people. Suki does not connect well with people, so interacting with them is difficult. Given how she uses anger as a first means to ( ... )
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After reading over and discussing your application, we have decided that we cannot accept your application at this time for the following reasons:
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REVISION REQUEST
After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
- Please expand on the Abilities section with more detail. We would like you to give special attention to the observational ability as we're no clear what is meant by it. Also, please add in a little about her computer aptitude.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.Reply
Although, if anything else needs to be changed, please let me know!
EDIT: Forgot to add, link is here!
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Congratulations! Your application has been accepted. Please respond with your character's journal name. Once you've completed that, please join reimsacademy, reimsactivities, reimsassembly and, optionally, reimsantics.
Also, please comment to the Taken List by Canon and Student/Faculty Directory. Check out your Room Assignments and please visit the Official History-Making Meme to establish existing CR should your character not be a new transfer.
We appreciate your effort and look forward to roleplaying with you.
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REVISION REQUEST
After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
- The Personality Section doesn't explain why the character dislikes being touched so much. Please expand on this.
- In the Personality section there is a reference to a character names Yvonne and that Alyss is very protective to the point of getting violent over her. No where in the AU History is Yvonne even mentioned. Who is she? What is her relationship to Alyss? Why does she react that way in regards to Yvonne? How is Alyss reacting to Yvonne not being at Reims? These are the type of questions we would like to be addressed in a revision of the AU History.
- The application references a hacking percentage in the ability section. Whereas we're okay with it being used like that in the application, we eould like to remind you that, if accepted, such percentages or other qualifiers like 'unhackable' are not allowed.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any ( ... )Reply
Aaand revised!
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