fic: Closet (Looking Through You Remix) (SGA, John/Rodney/Ronon/Teyla, NC-17)

[jammasterjayne]

Title: Closet (Looking Through You Remix)
Author: helens78Summary: Ronon and Teyla are beautiful together, and still Rodney doesn't want to be here

Comments

[kassrachel]

Oh, wow. This is terrific -- hot, disturbing, discomfiting, shiny. :-) I love Ronon and Teyla here -- I mean,

"Good," Teyla breathed. She did something, bore down a little harder with her next undulation, and Ronon groaned. He pushed back against her grip, and despite her leverage, it was clear he could move her if he really wanted to. She eased her weight off his hands and raised an eyebrow at him.

"Shall I let you go?" she murmured, shifting her hips from side to side. Ronon gasped and shook his head, letting his arms fall above his head again, this time crossing his wrists over each other as he clenched his hands into fists. Teyla smiled and pinned his hands with one of hers, and Rodney's dick jumped in John's hand.

-- guh!

[helsmeta]

Thank you so much! And oh, yes, Ronon and Teyla are terrific -- so comfortable with each other and with these roles, enough so to try to draw Rodney in, to try to show him what he can do if he wants to. It may not be their story, but they have something important to do here. *hugs them both*

[saffronhouse]

Oh, very nice! Lovely and so difficult.

[helsmeta]

Thank you! It's definitely not an easy scene (or in this world, an easy relationship), but it was a LOT of fun to write. :)

[banksiapossum]

This is really clever writing. It is amazing to see so much skill in your fic. At first I was a little anxious when John's hand pressed Rodney's throat and I stopped reading for a while, but it is a fascinating piece and as I read it again, and again several times, I kept seeing how well it was crafted and my admiration for your talent deepened. I am very impressed by this

[helsmeta]

Thank you so much! Wow. :) I loved writing this, and if you're more interested in hearing about my thoughts as I wrote, I did commentary both on the original wonderful scene by panisdead and on the remix here. :)

That's one fine piece of writing.

[anonymous]

I appreciate how much is packed into such a small story. I'm kind of surprised by the comment replies mentioning Rodney's failure to communicate. From my perspective, he was crystal-clear throughout the story. John repeatedly failed to listen as Rodney's Dom. I enjoyed Ronon attempt to warn John. I'm guessing John is very inexperienced as a Dom in this reality. I enjoy BDSM in SGA as much as the next gal, but I'm skeptical that John & Rodney can work out...unless John gets his head out of his *ss and learns from his mistakes. Maybe Teyla will give him some pointers. :-)

Very nicely done!

Re: That's one fine piece of writing.

[helsmeta]

Thanks so much! :) And yeah -- this was one time where John totally and completely guessed wrong, and the first step to figuring out where to go is going to be whether John can admit he was wrong or not. He and Rodney are both pretty stubborn!

[secondsilk]

Oh, cool.

Difficult, but cool. John and Rodney seem to be always across purposes. It's not just that John is not good (read: really bad) at expressing his feelings, I think he's really bad at feelings full stop, at reading other people's as well as knowing his own. The idea that Rodney's physical reaction is all that matters.

So it'll be up to Rodney, socially awkward as he can be, to explain in words that John can understand. Which might be difficult with the distraction of Teyla and Ronon.

[helsmeta]

:) I'm glad you liked it! And you're dead-on about John. It's a case where, to him, he was getting mixed signals, and to Rodney, he was saying "not now", and Rodney understands John, but now things are gonna be awkward...

*pets everybody*