[Fic] Dare you to move : two

[rennie_88]

Title: Dare you to Move
Pairing: Jaemin
Length: Chapter 2/10
Genre: high school AU,angst,drama
Warnings: bullying. bullying
(Plz don't hate/bash me, there has to be excessive bullying for there to be a bodyguard. :P)

Story request by rikuma, i hope you like it! <3
Summary : Changmin is the loser who everyone bullies at school. He's also the only son of the city

Comments

[rikuma]

omg!!!!
the other kids was just ...urgh!!!!!
i'm going to crack THEIR bones for you Minnie!!!!
let me at them...let me at themmm....
it's okay untill Jaejoongie the bodyguard comes i'll protect!!!!
"and maybe sometimes slobber you with kisses...cause that is my payment...keke...ehem but anyway we can talk payment later...i just....really hate the sick-rich man's game...huhu...:((

and i ADORE this just as much as i ADOre the first one...:))

[rennie_88]

do you want to feature in the story and break their bones for min?? hahahahahaha!!! i'll let you at them gladly but then joongie will have to kick you out so he can sweep min off his feet and carry him off into the sunset! *_* ~~~
'kisses payment' LOL you're a scary bodyguard hahahahaha but that actually might be a good idea hmmmmmmmmmm
what do u want me to do to the rich boys?? hmmm joongie wont have a problem carrying out your orders :P

awweeee there you go with 'adore' again *squeal* hahahahaha u know.. i think i'll just give you chapter 3 now ~ lalalalalalala

[rikuma]

"insert hopeful stare....owh..please..please...super uber mega please..."
haha...
gimme..gimme..."makes grabby hands..."
awh...i'll gladly kick myself out of the picture to give way to Jaemin!!!..keke...
and hurm the boys??
well would be better to humiliate them and make everyone turn against them cause aren't bullies are usually hated at least discreetly by their supporters??
keke...
put paint in their lockers...
change their PE uniforms into poms and skirts??
hehe...
"oops my not so discreet fetish for cross dressing is exposed but i guesss i only like our boys to do that *ehem*minnie*ehem*
hehe...:))

[rennie_88]

your wish is my command haha! ch 3 up !<3
it's ok you're just protecting the merchandise until jaejoong can collect XDD
hmmmmmmmm ok good point about humiliating bullies! i'll think about it and see what i can come up with ~ hoho i wouldn't know how to do crossdressing LOL it just makes me laugh XDD

[reikonan]

Those boys! Why are they so cruel to Changmin even though he hasn't done anything at all. I wonder when will Jae make his appearance.

[rennie_88]

mean kids usually are mean for no reason..and others join in cuz of peer pressure. social bully groups are scary things. :(
jae's coming very soon! ch 4 !

[dreaming_col]

Minnie~~!!!!! *snuggles*

It's been a long day and my brain's exhausted, so that's all the comment I have you. But still.

Minnie~!!!!

[rennie_88]

lolol! very articulate. but to the point. MINNIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe!! <3 <3 (oh..writing it like that and it looks like 'mine'.. .KYA just imagining mine!jaemin is blowing my mind *_*)~ someone needs to do sthg with this

[dreaming_col]

Articulation was not my friend last night. You get what you get. XP

Lol! Well, considering Mine!Jae is channeling my vision of him for my demon fic, and that could very well turn into JaeMin... ^_~

[rennie_88]

OH PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEE god every time u so much as mention ur demon fic i get all alksjdflksjflksjfldjldkj im so impatiently ready to read it LOL

[miruu_kira]

ooooh my God!!!!
how can a high school student being so cruel??!!! oh God, i really want to punch back that arrogant, selfish kids!!!!

when u described the school, i imagined it as a school where the background has a dark aura, lol, like in the comic,
i was too surprised to read that min moved to a new school, no junsu???

and and and chun-ah, why didn't u protect changminnie??! i mean, why can he just go inside the school after school finished and made sure min was okay, so he can help min, T.T

the first think that across my mind read this chapter is that sure min's family is so humble and low profile till most of the students can't easily known min, cause in my school, if u son or daughter of a governor, u can easily be known, hehehehe,

it's a nice chapter, although u torture minnie again here, but sure the way u tell and described everything, i like it, Great!!! :DD

ah there's something i want to ask too, will yunho take a role here?? hhehe, as i remember, i didn't read his name in both chap 1 and 2,
and sorry if i got a long comment,

[rennie_88]

the bad guys will all be punished later when mr joongie gets a hold of them :P
i didn't explain the first chapter well, but his new highschool is where he meets junsu!
i think bodyguards arent allowed in the school cuz its supposed to be a safe place with only students. and bullying goes on secretly so ... if chunnie saved hiim tho he wouldn't need jae and we need our jaemin haha
yunho will appear towards the end chapters ^^ his role is kinda small in this fic ~
no dont worry, your comment isn't long at all, but i like long/short/anything :) thank you for reading and commenting!!

[miruu_kira]

yaaaay!!! Can't wait for jaejae to do that,
i will lend him a hand, kekeke,
yeah, that's right, hehe, we need a jaemin hereee,
ouuuw, poor yunho, atleast he will get a role, :D

[rennie_88]

jae will have to be cool and kickass hehe *_* !! so that poor min will totally fall for him hahahaha
u can help out too and kick their butts XD haha
mmm i could only think of one way of adding yunho in :( sooo..

[crimson_miharu]

Ugh this whole chapter pissed me off! I wanted to yell at the bitch ass students as well as Changmin! I wanted him to at least stand up for himself verbally since I knew he couldn't defend himself physically (and yes I'm aware he is carrying some deep scars from his previous experience but still T_T). It seems judgements were past by both parties since Min had already deemed them to be the same as his previous school without even bothering to even try and be positive prior to the bully incident here and the people here judge him based on the vibes he unknowingly sent out

[rennie_88]

i'm sorry! plz dont be too pissed TT huu im worried now maybe i overdid it TT but min will slowly learn how to stand up for himself later in the story (with the help of jaejoong :P)~ its just the beginning so he's young and at the very bottom weak and loser state because i was trying to set up for the reason why he'd need an undercover bodyguard at school :S

and i didn't realize i should edit to make it more clear but the first part of the story with junsu is the present time and he's like 10th grade..and then i went back to talk about his middle school where the first bullying happened and then he had transferred from that middle school to the new high school which is where he meets junsu ..it was all originally one huge big chapter so after i split it i didn't realize that the explanation was lost :O !i'll go back and edit that, so thank you very much for pointing it out <3 :)

[crimson_miharu]

Ah I see. I felt a little sad because I thought he and Su were separated and both were suffering alone. LOL and don't be sorry or worried. I was just hoping he would've said something in his defense. Don't change a thing and don't water down the story in anyway. Like I said it's sad but stuff like this does happen. I can't wait for Jae's appearance :D

[rennie_88]

awwe no~ hehe min needs a friend and duckbutt is just the right fit :P
thank you for your support :) <3
yeah worse stuff than this does happen but thank god its only just a story :S i dont know if its realistic or not, but feeling guilty LOL XDDD