Very good writing. Be careful what you submit though; anything that comes off as slightly "dangerous" to yourself or someone else will be reported to the good 'ole access center.
the first time through, i missed the "i wrote these awhile ago" and i was liek wtf! i thought i made you happy! but now it is all coming together....you are a very talented poet, but as previously stated, if anything "suspicious" is submitted, you better do it annonymously or crazy deb brown will be ALL over you!
this is tim, i dont have a lj
anonymous
February 10 2004, 20:43:38 UTC
hey rob, hmmm i like untitled 3, cut, and progression. The other two are kinda more like song lyrics than poems, i can see someone singing them. U should get a tile for untitled 3, cuz if people have a title they can identify w/ the poem better. The Hidden End maybe? On Cut, see if u can replace forever more, with something, cuz that just brings up Edgar Allen Poe images, and using famous work doesnt go over to well with critics. Progression, just see if u can cut down on the doggeral rhyme, and i think you've got 3 poems that'll make the mag. Tim
You rock at poetry Rob. I love them all especially untitled 3, cut, and progression. I think you should submit them all. Well maybe not "cut" cuz they might think something bad. lol. But awesome job.
Ahhhhh!! Too many Tom Brady icons in comments! Ahhhh!
Anywho, Cut is probably the one I would most likely submit because I'm most satisfied with it. Although a new title is in order...thinking about it, thinking about it. Untitled 3 is probably next most likely to be submitted, with a name as well.
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especially the picture!! yeah tom! :p
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hmmm i like untitled 3, cut, and progression. The other two are kinda more like song lyrics than poems, i can see someone singing them. U should get a tile for untitled 3, cuz if people have a title they can identify w/ the poem better. The Hidden End maybe? On Cut, see if u can replace forever more, with something, cuz that just brings up Edgar Allen Poe images, and using famous work doesnt go over to well with critics. Progression, just see if u can cut down on the doggeral rhyme, and i think you've got 3 poems that'll make the mag.
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Thanks for the positive comments, untitled 3 and cut will most likely be submitted, but maybe more still.
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Anywho, Cut is probably the one I would most likely submit because I'm most satisfied with it. Although a new title is in order...thinking about it, thinking about it. Untitled 3 is probably next most likely to be submitted, with a name as well.
Thanks for liking them :-P
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