Comments | riverain: Fic: Target Practice (Ten/Jack, PG-13)

riverain

Fic: Target Practice (Ten/Jack, PG-13)

Nov 30, 2008 16:32

Title: Target Practice
Author: riverain
Pairing/Characters: Ten/Jack
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1049
Spoilers: None.
Summary: The Doctor hates guns, but when he finds Jack shooting targets in his TARDIS, some teasing leads to a challenge.

( Bullseye. )

slash, fanfic, ten/jack, doctor who

Comments 12

nightrider101 December 1 2008, 01:54:57 UTC

Oh, this was wonderful! You have the exchange between the two down perfectly.

It's hard to imagine the Doctor shooting a gun, but you managed to write it in a believable way - we all know he can't resist a challenge. :)

“Mine's bigger.”

The Doctor flinches slightly and then a second later says, “Mine lasts longer.” He smirks.

“Only by three rounds,” Jack says, leaning against the divider.

Hee! Too funny!

Wonderful story with a rather hot ending! Great job!

riverain December 1 2008, 07:42:15 UTC

Aw, thank you. I'm not really much of a Ten/Jack person, and I don't read it much, so I wasn't entirely sure about writing it, but I had an idea and so I went with it. Making the Doctor shoot a gun was a bit of a challenge too, and I'm pleased that you think I managed to pull it off.

Glad you liked it! ^^

nightrider101 December 1 2008, 11:16:19 UTC

It was wonderful!

I'm an avid Ten/Jack fan and firmly believe there isn't enough fic with this pairing. :) I'm glad you decided to take a chance and write it!

xanium December 1 2008, 07:45:22 UTC

Ahhh I could totally imagine them having that conversation with the challenge and everything :P

Gotta love innuendo! And the ending was so cute, but dammit, why can't the Doctor just love Jack...

:P cute and funny!!

riverain December 2 2008, 04:27:52 UTC

Gosh, it was hard enough to make the Doctor pick up a gun and now you want me to bend canon even more?

Haha, j/k, I'll try that out next time. =)

xanium December 2 2008, 08:25:30 UTC

:P When it comes to DW slash, I am always one to suggest bending canon for sake of porn!

Also, the Doctor always swore against guns...never recall him swearing against man/man relationships lol

joolz01 December 1 2008, 18:24:33 UTC

A very fun scene. The Doctor can't help rising to the bait with Jack. Too bad the prize wasn't a good snog instead - maybe next time. LOL Thanks for the fic.

riverain December 2 2008, 03:32:10 UTC

Hee, that'll definitely a be a thought the next time I write this pair. ^^

dock_leaf December 1 2008, 18:55:20 UTC

Oh, now THIS needs a sequel! Really it does...and I'm not a gun person, but the whole 'this is how you do it' thing got me quite...happy. Yes. Happy...

riverain December 2 2008, 03:33:06 UTC

Um, sequel? *blank*

What kind of sequel where you hoping for? =P

vail_kagami December 2 2008, 10:30:03 UTC

When I saw that Jack/Gwen target practice scene on Torchwood I thought that it would have been much better with the Doctor in Gwen's place. Thank you for writing this!

“Mine's bigger.”
The Doctor flinches slightly and then a second later says, “Mine lasts longer.” He smirks.
WIN!

riverain December 2 2008, 13:56:15 UTC

That's what I was thinking! Haha, thanks, I'm glad you liked it. And I adore that icon.