creative writing

[rodion_kjd]

I have to write a dramatic monologue (its a kind of poem), its due wednsday. Heres my first attempt / draft. Brutal honesty apreciated.
Thanks friends.

<3 Ken

I would have it be a different way

Comments

[neurotickid]

from the bottom of my heart, its very pretty,(i mean it, it's good)

<3 paul

[lobo_a_gogo]

wow, ken i didnt know you had feelings like normal people.
<3

[19522002]

haha x2

[skittl]

well done, kenbot. seriously. i love the word 'quixotic'.

[anonymous]

you might wanna try putting it in ballad form (8-6-8-6). it might have more effect with a more consistent meter. Other than that its really damn good.

[rodion_kjd]

thank you for the suggestions, much appreciated. who are you????